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  • Saad

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    July 31, 2021 at 2:43 PM
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    Make paragraph 2 incline more towards the impact of junk food, rather than mentioning the types of junk foods and there is also repetition, use ‘moreover’ or other cohesive devices not more than once in the same sentence/ line.