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Introduction- detail- detailed
Write a clear thesis statement incorporating the main points
BP1: our daily- their daily
available in- where clothes are available in
a lot- a lot of time
in 19th- in the 19th
were very confined with the choices-had restricted choices
they get- they got
don’t write personal examples
but and whereas can’t be used together in a single sentence
due to the lack- due to lack
from online- from online websites
Correlative Comparative- The more we explore, the higher the chances are to accomplish our needs
BP2: plethora- a plethora
lose- loose
Although- erroneous complex sentence
make a right- make the right
end up- end up in
a wrong- the wrong
Like for example- Don’t write like in formal letters- For instance
Example is not clear. Rewrite it
Conclusion- keeping- keep
their- his
have a firm decision- be firm in his decision
their requirement- his requirement
Band Score: 4/6 Keep Writing!
