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Your sentence structure needs to be worked upon.
You have not displayed your lexical resource, pls refrain from using one word twice. “English language”, “global language”, “native language” are repeating a lot. Try using synonyms.
Few sentences are not making sense such as – “Sharing of new technology can be done in an easier way as before where communication will be no more a barrier” this means opposite to what you actually want to express.
“which allows everyone one on this planet can enjoy the benefits of new inventions”
“and we cannot able to understand great literatures”
“English as the only language as tool of communication”
“helps in surmounting great summits in various fields together where as it has many ill effects on native customs and traditions as it leads to the extinction of native languages .” THIS PART IS PARTICULARLY VERY WELL WRITTEN.
Content to justify ideas is not balanced, particularly in BP1, try to give equal amount of justification or explanation for each of your ideas.
You could have used better ideas in your BP2, what you have written are not very distinct from each other.
I have tried writing with same points as yours to give you an idea about balancing the content of ideas and using connectors and synonyms.
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Many a person Postulates that surge/jump in importance of English language, which is majorly contributed by/attributed to tourism, will eventually make it the only global language. This will prove to be meritorious for allowing free flow of ideas among countries but with down side of overshadowing the cultures.
One of the significant bright sides of English becoming lingua franca of the world, is that it will facilitate the smooth exchange of ideas. In other words, with ease in sharing of technologies, discoveries and inventions due to single common tool of communication, learning and advancement will be promoted in the whole world and not only in a particular region. Secondly, English becoming the only spoken language will aid in economic growth. Which is to say that, it will assist in generating immense employment avenues by breaking the language barriers which prominently exist in present world, ultimately boosting the economies.
On the other hand, there are several disadvantages of English being the only dominant language. Such as, disappearance of native languages and cultures. To expound, regional language is the essence of any region, with its culture depending on it and overpowering of English as a language on vernacular languages, could result in obsolescence of the latter and tenets in the vicinity. Lastly, English becoming only means of communication will result in waning of historical importance of a place. Which means that, gradually spoken language of a place will dissipate to a state of becoming dead, finally leading to inability among the natives of reading scriptures written in their own language.
To conclude, While the society can reap benefits of economic growth and development by having English as the only means of communication. This will also came at the detriment of cultural disappearance.
