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There is no doubt that advertisements are everywhere and sometimes, even intrusive. Many audiences believe that it entices them to purchase things while remaining are not alluring (the remaining are not allured by it). I am more inclined towards adverts (advertisements) achievement in making us in buy things.
On the one hand, no one can escape from the ads( advertisements) as they are ubiquitous whether one is sitting at home watching Commercial ads ( commercial advertisements) or walking on the street looking at Billboards ( billboards ), or traveling in a bus having a covert ad(advertisement) on it. It’s a human tendency is that too much of a thing can make him bored and with time, he starts ignoring it. For example, nowadays, people don’t even pick telemarketing cold call by looking at name prompt in smartphones. However, technological advancement has opened a variety of other ways to lure people with ads( advertisements).
On the other hand, advertisements help people to choose, compare, decide and purchase products of different brands without even going to a physical shop. One of the main reasons, companies allots (allot) heavy budgets in (for) marketing is to understand and identify their customer-specific market and interest group. For instance, e-commerce websites like Amazon or Flipkart are available 24 by 7 and have an option to buy items from the different categories by comparing them with other brands with (on) easy monthly instalments . Though adverts, sometimes make people spend over their budget as it tempts them to buy more than ever (their)need.
To conclude, advertisements helps(help) us to be up-to-date with the latest products available in the market, and it’s up to one’s wisdom to understand the need of the products displayed in advertisements and their capacity to buy and pay for them without busting out financial budget.
Instructions & Observations
1. Corrections are in bold in the essay above.
2. Use formal language ….. ads/adverts – should be advertisements
3. Be careful about the subject –verb agreement ……’ companies allot’ not allots, advertisements help ( not helps)
4. Focus on use of prepositions – allot heavy budgets for marketing , buy items on easy monthly instalments…..
Feedback:
Approach is good and task response is satisfactory. The essay is well structured with proper paragraphing and sufficient lexical resources. Errors in subject verb agreement, use of prepositions and sentence formation can be seen in the essay. Use of informal words can also be seen in some places.
Band Score : 4/6
