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THESE DAYS THERE HAS BEEN AN INTRIGUING DEBATE ON THE TOPIC THAT WHETHER TRADITIONAL NEWS PAPERS AND MAGAZINES WILL BECOME OBSOLETE OWING TO E-BBOKS AND TECHNOLOGICAL ADVANCEMENTS OR THEY SHALL CONTINUE TO REMAIN RELEVANT. IN MY OPINION, DUE TO DEEP PENETRATION OF INTERNET IN SOCIETY AND CONTINUOS EVOLUTION OF MODERN TECHNOLOGY NEWS-PAPERS AND MAGAZINES WILL LOOSE (lose)THEIR RELEVANCE SOONER THAN LATER.
WE ALL KNOW, ONLY FEW YEARS BACK, MOBILE PHONES WERE LUXURY IN OUR SOCIETY AND INTERNET ACCESS WAS LIMITED TO CAFES. HOWEVER, AS TECHNOLOGY HAS ADVANCED, COST OF MOBILES PHONE (mobile phones) AND CHARGES TOWARDS USING INTERNET HAVE REDUCED SUBSTAINTIALLY AND DUE TO WHICH THESE MOBILE AND INTERNET HAVE BECOME NECESSITIES. DUE TO THIS, OUR LOT OF HABBITS HAVE ALSO CHANGED AND ONE OF THEM IS THE WAY WE READ NEWS PAERS AND MAGAZINES. NOW, WE HAVE HUNDREDS OF APPLICATIONS IN OUR PHONES AND ANY KIND OF NEWS OR INFORMATION IS ON OUR FINGERTIPS WITH-IN MOMENTS. FOR EXAMPLE, THE CIRCULATION OF ALL LEADING NEWS PAPERS HAVE ( has) REDUCED CONSIDERABLY AND MOST OF THEM HAVE LAUNCHED PAID VERSION OF THEIR MOBILE APPLICATIONS TO COMPENSATE FOR THEIR LOST REVENUE.
FURTHER, IN CURRENT ERA PEOPLE DO NOT HAVE ENOUGH TIME TO READ PHYSICAL VERSIONS OF MAGAZINES OF (or)NEWS PAPER AND THEY WANT TO READ NEWS OR BOOKS ON THE GO, WHICH IS ONLY POSSIBLE WHEN ITS AVAILABLE IN THEIR DEVICES SUCH AS MOBILE PHONES OF ( or)TABLETS. CARRYING PHYSIAL COPIES OF BOOKS IS CUMBERSOME, WHICH PEOPLE WANT TO AVOID.
IN CONCLUSION, I WOULD LIKE TO RE-STATE THAT NOTHING IS PERMANENT AND ERA OF NEWS PAPER AND MAGAZINE IS GOING TO END SOON.
Instructions & Observations
1. Pls see the corrections in bold in the essay above.
2. Incorrect use of verb …. Loose … should be lose
3. Subject verb agreement needs improvement.
4. The entire essay should not be written in capital letters.
Feedback
Well attempted. A good approach with a satisfactory task response. Good lexical resource with minor incorrect use of words. Subject verb and preposition errors are present in few places . Well structured with use of good cohesive devices.
Band Score: 4.5/6
