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The charts depicts the money expend and generated for children’s charity in the particular country USA for a single year, 2016. Overall, it is conspicuous that there are approximately 6 revenue streams as opposed to the expenditures. Moreover, the collection of amount collected from different sources are (is) slightly greater than the spend amount.
As it is presented in the pie chart, the donated food accounts for 86.6% while other income, government grants, and investment income covers only a tiny fraction. Moreover, community contributions constitutes (10.4 percent) than program revenue which makes up only a small portion (2.2%). ( Moreover Community contributions and program revenue contributes 10.4% & 2.2% which makes up only a small portion of the total revenue sources.
In terms of expenditures, the spends were more on program services holding a very large proportion. On the contrary, fundraising, management and general holds only a small fraction.(2.6% and 1.6% respectively).
Overall, it could be plainly viewed that total amount collected through the income model is roughly around 53.5 million while payouts accounts for a total of roughly 53 million.
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The answer has an appropriate introduction which has been attempted to be expressed in his/her own words. There is good coverage of the data and a brief reference to contrasting trends. The answer can be followed easily. In order to gain higher marks for content, it would be expected to select the salient features of the graph and comment primarily on these. Sentences are long but lack complexity. There are some errors in tense, verb form and sentence formation which interfere slightly with the flow of the answer.
Band Score: 2/3
