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Feedback:
Although the script contains some good arguments, these are presented using poor structures and the answer is not very coherent. You have a clear point of view but not all the supporting arguments are linked together well and sometimes ideas are left unfinished. There is quite a lot of relevant vocabulary but this is not used skilfully and sentences often have words missing or lapse into different styles. The answer is spoilt by grammatical errors and poor expression
Band Score : 1.5/3
