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Humans usually tend to focus on the happenings around their locality, while there are few groups of people who consider spending their valuable time to accustom themselves with the activities around the globe. The local news would be brought to your doorstep through word of mouth even if we refrain ourselves from it, but to be familiar with the happenings in different countries in (is) not a piece of cake. <font face=”inherit”>This essay is a precise </font>explanation<font face=”inherit”> on these different ideas</font>
To begin with, citizens are usually keen on enhancing their knowledge with the news occurring in and around their locality. This is truly a necessity to update oneself with the daily activities of the countries to a basic level. Usually immense amount of time is spent on investigating on the current happenings around us. A mere overall idea would suffice the need and moreover it is impossible to voluntarily stay away from the headlines in the nation. Every single important headline passes on with the word of mouth especially in a country like India.
In the current fast-moving era to develop our knowledge on the non-local news is a compulsion. We just cannot ignore the international news as it was done during the earlier days. As one nation we would be governed by a similar set of rules, same old medical treatment, old fashioned development in the infrastructures, and how to manage during a natural calamity. For example, the forest fire in Australia that made the whole human race weep. When calamities like these reaches (reach) the citizens of another country localities tend to verify their current safety measures and improvise on areas they lack.
It is definitely an important factor to stay tuned to the activities in and around which oneself cannot force them away from(.) (Full stop) on (On)the other hand it is now a necessity to know the development, governing policies, safety measures and so on.
Observations:
1. is not a piece of cake
2. Example missing in the Body paragraph 1
3. these reaches – these reach (subject – verb agreement)
4. It is definitely an important factor to stay tuned to the activities in and around which oneself cannot force them away from.
Correct– It is definitely an important factor to stay tuned to the activities in and around which one cannot force oneself away from..
5. The last sentence is not expressing your position or your idea well as ‘so on’ leaves everyone guessing.
Feedback :
Well attempted . The essay addresses the task, but only incompletely answers the question. A position is not presented clearly and ideas are sometimes insufficiently developed or extended so the argument is rather thin. Nevertheless, there is a clear overall progression in the response because ideas are logically organized. A range of markers is used effectively to link ideas, although there are errors in the use of some basic connectives. Range of vocabulary and sentence formation can be further improved. Some expressions remain unclear. Nevertheless, there is sufficient range and control to be adequate for the task. A mix of simple and complex structures is evident, but errors in grammar and punctuation occur which indicate limitations in control, although such lapses generally do not reduce communication.
Band Score: 4 / 6
