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INTRODUCTION: folks- informal
this lead- this will lead
just paraphrase and write a thesis statement in your introduction. Add details in your body paragraphs
BP 1: Since- since
household accessories- collocation mistake- household items
that very- is very
lost- loose
recent last month- recently published article
Of- of
Don’t mention the source name in your example
BP 2: owned- own
not holds- don’t hold
CONCLUSION: Thus, we can conclude that- Inconclusion
needs of products- essentials
the people- people
has been- have been
sad thing- informal
BAND SCORE: 3/6 Keep Writing!
