Feedback: Introduction needs to be improved as per the requirements such as: Paraphrasing, Thesis Statement, and outline rest should be discussed in the following paragraphs. Need to work cohesive devices as found less instead simple structures and also try to avid multiple sentences in future.
Band: 2.5/6
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