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The bar graph depicts the population of inhabitants of the Gormez Straits namely Seals, Dolphins, and Whales from the year 2006 to 2018. Overall, it can be seen that the population of seals and dolphins kept on increasing at a steady rate with a slight downfall in between the 12 years.
The population of Seals in the year 2006 was the highest at around 42 and it decreased by half in the year 2010 to around 22. The population of Dolphins in the year 2006 was nearly at 18 slightly less than the population of whales but it significantly increased to (around) 21 in the year 2010. From 2014 to 2018 the population of seals increased from about 35 in the year 2014 to around 45 in 2018 nearly a 10% increase . And (however,) the population of dolphins sharply increased from 32 in 2014 to about 52 in 2018 and it was the highest ever population recorded for dolphins throughout the years.
The population of whales showed a similar trend throughout the given period. In 2006 the population of whales was (about)half that of seals around 23, it slightly increased to ( about) 25 in the year 2010and after a gradual decrease in the year 2014 it increased to around 28 in the year 2018.
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Good effort has been made to answer the question and describe the main points in the chart. General overview and paraphrasing is satisfactory. Though the values are not exact and hence words like nearly, about etc., needs to be used before values. The writing progresses logically and the trends have been described well. Language of comparison and contrast has been used throughout though limited use of cohesive devices limits its score
Band Score: 2/3
