AdministratorOctober 11, 2021 at 12:36 PM50 Network PointsActivity Points 7670
* A couple of incorrect word choices (they didn’t fit well in the sentences) – indulge,
* I wouldn’t use ‘let us see’ in the thesis statement. Check out a few thesis statements in sample essays.
*Problems with plural nouns . “make decision” in second paragraph should be ‘decisions’
*’underestimate’ is written as a single word, no space.
* In the conclusion, you probably meant ‘better not to include juniors’