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* ” it’s own set of benefits” (its own set of…) [look up ‘it’s’ vs ‘its’]
* Please review use of ‘root’ as a verb in ‘This tradition roots’ , ‘this tradition has its roots in…’ might be better.
*”can be ensured to be provided”. Some grammarians disapprove of ‘double passive’.
*’Parents are significantly responsible to incorporate essential’ – ‘significantly’ here doesn’t seem to fit.
Overall, your sentences show an advanced grasp of grammar. Our goal is to demonstrate variety in sentence structure without ending up with contrived, complicated structures.
Synonyms are not the only way to avoid repetition. Omissions and proper referencing can also help us avoid repetition. I shall elaborate this in class.
Score 5/6.
