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* “pros and cons effects” does not collocate well.
* The use of ‘enable’ in the second sentence of the first body paragraph is incorrect. Perhaps, you meant to say ‘people are able to’.*”online marketing influence individual” (online marketing influences individuals… )
*”if a person is purchased luxury items” (if a person purchases…)
*”people, who do not want to buy useless things, have” – The commas here were not necessary at all. Look up ‘relative clause when to use commas)
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