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    October 17, 2021 at 5:36 PM

    The chart illustrates the quantitative data of three aquatic animals in the Gormez Straits between 2006 and 2018. Overall, it can be seen that while the amount of dolphins increased (significantly), figures of seals and whales showed a marginal rise over the period of time. <div>

    To begin, population of dolphin were (was) slightly over fifteen in 2006, (the)least among three at that time. A constant upward trend was seen and the number of whales (dolphins) rose to around fifty two by the year 2018, which was far higher than seals and whales.
    Although, the quantity of seals were highest in 2006, their amount plummeted to half in four years period. The figures , then began to rise steadily finishing off at forty three, slightly higher from where the data was initially recorded.

    Likewise, the information on whales too showed fluctuations, although less significant than seals. The figures revealed around twenty two whales in 2006 and continued to show a slow rise till 2014, where the numbers declined to just above twenty, lowest at that time. The amount of whales then increased to an approximate of twenty eight by the year 2018.

    Observations :

    1. Population takes a singular verb hence ‘population was’

    2. In the 2nd paragraph it should be dolphins and not whales

    <b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Feedback:

    Good effort has been made to answer the question and describe the main points in the chart. General overview and paraphrasing is satisfactory. The writing progresses logically and the trends have been described well. Language of comparison and contrast has been used throughout though some Grammar errors in subject verb agreement and tenses are seen in the task. In 2nd paragraph the data described is incorrect in one place .

    Band Score : 2/3


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