AdministratorOctober 21, 2021 at 3:39 PM50 Network PointsActivity Points 7800
* When you wish to emphasize that only few people want to do something, ‘a few people..’ will not convey that idea fully.
“In the recent time, a few people want to choose their career as teacher” (In recent times, very few people want to chose a career in teaching)
* “in the past” is better than “in past time”
* “children into a better person” (children into better people / a child into a better person)
* Look up ‘less’ vs ‘fewer’
*”Parents also teach their children some basic etiquettes for example” (parents should also teach…)
Overall, I believe this essay had fewer errors than the ones I checked before. You could work a bit more on organizing the ideas and the conclusion paragraph.