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Feedback : Avoid personal pronouns especially in introduction
Every people ( is wrong usage as every is singular in usage)
By this way people (are) suffering
By this way people suffering economically and also the growth of nation deteriorates.(maintain parallelism; either keep both ideas in continuous form or indefinite)
Solutions (as asked in question ) should be in distinct paragraph , not in conclusion.
stick to Task-2 structure.
Work on sentence structure
Band : 2/6