ShahbazAdministratorOctober 25, 2021 at 12:49 PM
* ‘famous’ is not a suitable word choice here.
* Please review the use of the past tense in the first sentence of the first body paragraph. Since it’s a general trend and not something that happened only in the past , I would use ‘opt’ rather than ‘opted’.
* ‘it will lead to change their thoughts’ (lead to a change…)
* The sentence that starts with ‘These kinds of benefits to turning away from tertiary education’ is a bit confusing.