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* ‘the children who prefer to take a break between their studies after completing school have many positive sides.’ (‘The children…have positive sides’ is a bit odd. I would say ‘Taking a break has many positive sides’ or ‘ The children… enjoying many benefits)
* ‘disconnected with education and could not focus on higher studies.’ (and cannot focus)
* ‘behind of their classmates’ (behind their classmates)* ‘of free time that they have before.’ (Did you mean ‘the free time that they did not have before’ ?)
* Two sentences started with a small letter. ‘on the other hand’
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