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* This is a better first paragraph : “I recently came across an advertisement for a training
course that I think would be really useful for
my professional development. I’m writing to explain why I think it would be a great course for me to do” .* I don’t understand why you capitalized ‘scrum’ and ’email’.
* ‘it will be ease for’ (easy) – look up ‘easy’ vs ‘ease’
I recommend reading good sample letters to familiarize yourself with the various expressions we use to make requests etc.
Score: 4/6
