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* ‘every piece of information’ ( ‘information’ is uncountable)
* ‘People come to know…’ or ‘find out’ or’ people hear…’ would have worked better than ‘people know’ here.
* ‘as fast as it happened’ (as soon as it happens)‘People find out every detail of every theft, rape or murder as soon as they happen’
* ‘When we looked at the past’ (look )
* ‘For a start, Government’ (government) [do not capitalize after an introductory phrase]
* ‘their business.’ (their own businesses)
Score: 4.5/6
