AdministratorOctober 28, 2021 at 12:19 PM50 Network PointsActivity Points 7670
*’ women are not allowed to’ (women were not)
* The sequencing of ideas could have been improved in the first body paragraph.
* ‘every one’s’ (everyone’s)
* In the conclusion you said ‘movies play a vital role to spread fear in the society’. However, this idea was not mentioned in the body paragraph. We always restate what we have already said in the conclusion.