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  • Shahbaz

    Administrator
    November 7, 2021 at 12:51 PM
    50 Network Points
    Activity Points 7800

    * ”However, with the comfort and convenience, also comes” (the comma after ‘convenience’ is unnecessary)

    * There are no errors that stand out as obviously incorrect. Some word choices sounded a bit unusual e.g. “activities” being “carried forward” (if they meaning is ‘are done’ or ‘take place’ , then ‘carry forward’ would not fit well)

    * “provide the option to share pictures as well” (I believe you are talking about the option to share pictures in the review. This should have been clearly stated in my opinion)

    Score: 5/6

    The ideas were presented in a logical sequence. However, it is possible to improve the organization of ideas and the transitions.

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