AdministratorNovember 16, 2021 at 8:50 PM740 Network PointsActivity Points 6050
Grammatical accuracy is fine, however Range is limited.
This essay actually contradicts your own opinion. In the introduction you mentioned that you are taking one side however in the second body paragraph you talked about the other opinion. In these kinds of essays stick to one side of the opinion otherwise you will be marked down in coherence.
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