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* The sudden sentence breaks are assumed to be formatting errors and thus no comment has been made on them.
* ‘ in reference to the inconvenience faced’ ( I think ‘ an inconvenience that I faced’ would be much better. At the beginning of the letter, before we have talked about what happened, ‘an inconvenience’ would make more sense. Once it has already been introduced, ‘the inconvenience’ is better.
* ‘One of the staff member’ (members)
* ‘pleased by’ ( ‘pleased with’ is much more common)
* Look up ‘how to use ‘suggest” . It is possible to use suggest in this way — ‘I suggest that you do [something]’
* ‘an another warehouse’ (another warehouse) (Don’t use ‘an’ with ‘another’)
* ‘your image
in the retail industry.’* ‘Looking farward’ (forward)
Score : 2.25 / 3