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some consider the finest way to consume media (to gather information about surroundings) is newspaper,
I would appreciate the usage of cohesive devices.
Avoid using pronouns like we, I , you, our as they tend to informal tone
However, the news consumed this way is based on what is called click rate, here the heading is made juicy so that people click the news most of the time the titles are misleading. (This concession statement , if you want to mention then discuss the latter view in paragraph with impartial explanation and conclude B.P 2, with this concession statement as you did in B.P1 )
Conclusion needs to be more effective , I am expecting its better adherence with introduction.
Band : 4/6
