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In order to help students to improve there (their) performance,
However, school is known as second home of a children (inappropriate usage of connector)
,teachers plays (play) an important role
every pupils (pupil) in school – every is always used with singular noun
if students received (receive) a reward for doing good in exams
Anyhow (along with that) it (will) help (them) to work hard more(to work more hard in order to attain higher grades) to get higher grades.
Another reason is punished (punishment)
student who are send (who are detained as a punishment) for detention in order to punish them ,will lower there (their) interest in studies as well in attending the school .
they are growing up to be an adults (if) they will not have enough knowledge, (it will lead to more sufferings in their future) which affect them in there future ,
In conclusion , I personally believe that reward is more beneficial than punish(ment)
Feedback : Work on grammar basics, sentence structures and word forms. Understand the difference between their and there
Band: 2.5/6
