FalakAdministratorDecember 20, 2021 at 12:42 PM
Make more use of cohesive devices, it will add more cohesive to the piece
No example found in second body paragraph; also the second B.P should look like your discussing what “others” believe rather your own opinion
conclusion should be more effective ; talks about both ideas and your stand on the argument.
Band : 3.5/6