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while public transition is in the worst condition( and the worst condition/unavailability of public transportation) , and reliable solution is add tax . (to tackle this problem , government can levy high road tax)
Analysing the statement, it is clearly seen- better version of words could have chosen
Topic sentence needs to be loud and clear
.Everyone can buy a car as long as he has (can afford) revenue for it.
each of them own (owns)
I could see the solution mentioned in introduction is not the one that is prominent in body paragraph 2, and solution given in the conclusion is also something different from the one mentioned in introduction.
Band: 3.5/6
