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while the product quantity of rail mode has fluctuations.(while the products transported by rail had experienced some fluctuations)
In 1974(,) the products transported
through water and rail mode were nearly 38 million tones and 40 million tones (respectively)
Water’s trend slightly increased to 58 million tonnes in 1982. (and the quantity of stocks remained constant till 1994) During 1982 to 1994, the quantities of stocks were nearly 58 million tonnes
There is no requirement of putting facts in brackets, it can be included in the sentence itself.
Be careful with punctuation marks and try to reduce the verbosity of content using complex sentence structure. In feature paragraph 1, more grouping and comparison of data would have been appreciated rather than just explaining one mode of transportation.
keep writing!!
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