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,the government plays a (an) important role in maintaining (keeping) the environment safe and healthy.
stopping plastic waste from entering and contaminating water outlets (bodies) people are able to save drinking water and the natural habitat (for aquatic life)
such activities are more easy to educate people about the important (importance) of protecting the nature.
In conclusion(,) the government should
paraphrasing could be done effectively , avoid copying language from question
paragraphing has not been done as required , 2 views are presented in one paragraph; not advised.
second body paragraph seems to be distorted as it is the off-topic.
sentence range needs to be considered.
Band: 2.5/6
