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use terms like-from my perspective/as far as I am concerned[to mention opinion]
error: online platforms quite popular
avoid giving an example in between explanation/form an example at the end of the body paragraph for justification’
body para 2 the last line is incomplete
use terms like-it is believed that
NOTE: work on minor grammatical errors/develop a habit of proof reading and work more on connectors
work only on one sided explanation /as the question demands for it