[Falak]

Because,( comma is not required here) parents are highly encouraged to send their children to higher study to any reputed institute (,) (by which they gain international exposure and confidence. – the sentence is not justifying the usage of “because”)

Because parents want their children to gain international exposure and confidence, they are highly encouraged to send them to o any reputed universities across the globe) – suggested structure.

new peoples (people)

That is the main reason (these are the main reasons)

for going (sending)their children t

university’s students (university student)

continuous use of short sentences particularly in B.P 1 and B.P 2., proof- reading is must to avoid silly errors. Work on sentence range.

Band: 2.5/6