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720 Network Points
Activity Points 31650
Because,( comma is not required here) parents are highly encouraged to send their children to higher study to any reputed institute (,) (by which they gain international exposure and confidence. – the sentence is not justifying the usage of “because”)
Because parents want their children to gain international exposure and confidence, they are highly encouraged to send them to o any reputed universities across the globe) – suggested structure.
new peoples (people)
That is the main reason (these are the main reasons)
for going (sending)their children t
university’s students (university student)
continuous use of short sentences particularly in B.P 1 and B.P 2., proof- reading is must to avoid silly errors. Work on sentence range.
Band: 2.5/6