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Because,( comma is not required here) parents are highly encouraged to send their children to higher study to any reputed institute (,) (by which they gain international exposure and confidence. – the sentence is not justifying the usage of “because”)
Because parents want their children to gain international exposure and confidence, they are highly encouraged to send them to o any reputed universities across the globe) – suggested structure.
new peoples (people)
That is the main reason (these are the main reasons)
for going (sending)their children t
university’s students (university student)
continuous use of short sentences particularly in B.P 1 and B.P 2., proof- reading is must to avoid silly errors. Work on sentence range.
Band: 2.5/6
