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like master’s (masters)
most of the course(s) are available
In addition to this(,) many student
example quoted in B.P 1 , is not supporting the reasons mentioned. I would advise to include language barriers as one of the drawbacks and then mention this example.
Permanent Residency than (then) their Parents automatically
. Other then (than) this (,) many students
In addition to all these (,)
although their (there)
A little more cohesion is expected in B.P 2, as health facilities and ultimately parents living with them requires some binding explanation
Be careful with punctuation and use of ” Then and than” , ” their and there”
keep writing!!
Band: 3/6
