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Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing this letter to inform you that an article about my hometown which(that) has been published in your magazine recently has got some wrong information.
Since the article was about my hometown, I found it quite interesting to go through it in detail. Most of the particulars were rightly mentioned, but few details about the places in and around my town were mentioned wrongly. The places around my birthplace are Chennai Central, Beach, Perambur and Villivakkam. But, in your article, Tambaram is given which is very far from that spot.
Wrong details will lead(cause) confusion among the readers and mislead them when they visit the place. Being a best-selling magazine, it is always better to publish the correct particulars after collecting the datas(data) from reliable sources.
Please take necessary action at the earliest to edit and reprint the write-up in your next week’s edition.
Thanking you,
Yours faithfully,
Banumathy
Feedback:
Bhanumathy Ideas are coherent but clarity about (Incorrect information) is missing.
You have to make it clear in the first para ,whats wrong in that article.
In second para write about it more clearly.
Band score- 1.5/3
