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The tables show the percentage change of international students studying in Canada and the United States by country of origin between the years 2002 and 2003.
Overall, it is observed that there was a general increase in the number of international students. The data shows that the increase in the number of academics in the United States was moderate whereas the increment observed in Canada is quite sharp.
International student trends in Canada could be described as such.(there is no need for this line) The highest number of students who seek to study in Canada are from China. There is a sharp influx of students from China creating 45% increase that took the number of students from 5400 to 7850. Even though there is an increase in number of students from United States, it is not as pronounced as that of China. Increase shown by the number of students from United States is 6% which takes the number from 5000 to 5450. The lowest number of students is from India which was 2100 and the 35% increment took that number to 2835.
The trend shown in the United States shows that the overall student count in the States was almost 10 times more than what the count was in Canada, but the overall percentage increase is only 2%. The rise in the number of students went from 581600 to 592230. The greatest number of students is from India, but it is seen that there is a decrease in the number of students. The Indian student count dropped from 200,000 to 182,000 marking a 9% decrease. Canadian and Chinese students have gone on to increase 6% and 7%, respectively. These put their final numbers from 110,000 and 31,000 to 116,600 and 33,170.
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