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because (a) citizen
feel secure in this (delinquent) environment
Besides that,(enforcement of laws such as death penalty for capital offence is necessary…) it is necessary to have belief in the judicial system by the population,
Feedback : Paraphrasing has been done well, Task achievement is there. Though cohesion and coherence seems to be bit compromised as both body paragraphs are emphasizing on bad condition and government needs to do something (this something is “capital punishment”) , probably one linking idea would present your essay in better manner. Vocabulary certainly has room for improvement. Rest is fine.
Band: 4/6
