[Khyathi]

Few people are convinced that social media services have adverse effects on either individual or public. I completely agree with the statement, because social browsing has more cons than pros. This essay will enlighten the negative sides of the media on the person as well as the civilization and also the reasons for my view.

The unhealthy impacts of social platform on an individual are mainly, increase of peer pressure, addiction, and risk of being conned by the false information that is spread on the sites. Let’s see how peer pressure is developed in an individual. If a person in browsing over the media and watching all the things shared about others lifestyle, he/she will gradually compare himself with others who barely know him which in turn will lead to depression and also foster to engage in either self-harm or criminal thoughts, just to be acknowledged and respected in the community.

Another important outcome of its usage is addiction. These days many of the teenagers are interested in getting more likes, subscribers, comments etc., than others which is leading to” win at all costs attitude” weather by uploading inappropriate content or by posting wrong information. Because of this misleads society is being robbed in away or other. Every now and the, we are coming across an article on news regarding cyber trafficking and online frauds just because of blind trusts on what-ever information that is posted on the internet.

Despite of all this negativity, there are few positive impacts of social media such as study related contents are provided, can obtain up to the minute news. So, by limiting the browsing time, and sharing what is relevant online and trusting only the entrusted channels can reduce the ill impacts on this society.

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[isha]

Few people are convinced that social media services have adverse effects on individuals and the public. I completely agree with the statement, because social browsing has more cons than pros. This essay will enlighten the reader on the negative sides of the media on people as well as civilization.

The unhealthy impacts of social platforms on an individual are mainly an increase of peer pressure, addiction, and the risk of being conned by the false information that is spread on the sites. Let’s see how peer pressure is developed in an individual. If a person browses the media and watches all the things shared about others lifestyles, he or she will gradually compare himself with others who barely know him, which in turn will lead to depression and also foster the tendency to engage in either self-harm or criminal thoughts, just to be acknowledged and respected in the community.

Another important outcome of its usage is addiction. These days, many teenagers are interested in getting more likes, subscribers, comments, etc., than others, which is leading to a ” win at all costs attitude,” whether by uploading inappropriate content or by posting wrong information. Because of this misinformation, society is being robbed in some way or another. Every now and then, we come across an article in the news regarding cyber trafficking and online frauds, just because we blindly trust whatever information is posted on the internet.

Despite all this negativity, there are a few positive impacts of social media, such as the study related contents provided and the ability to obtain up-to-the minute news. So, by limiting the browsing time, sharing what is relevant online, and trusting only the entrusted channels, we can reduce the ill impacts on this society.

– Grammatical errors

– Pay attention to subject verb agreement

-Use connectors like To sum up, moreover..

Bands – 4/6

[tsering]

Information Technology usage has shot up since pandemic. Here we are going to highlights some of risk internet pose towards individuals and how social media have bad influence towards the community. These days internet usage has lead to increased loneliness, anxiety, peer pressure, false information leading to violence between different religion.

First and foremost, social media has huge negative impact on creativity. These days school kids or adult has reduce ability to create ideas, thinking or to analyze the information properly. (Example) These days most of school kids have easy access to any websites for school assignments but a decade back school kids and adults goes to Library to read, gather information from authorized source only.

Secondly, misinformation about the real world, (Example) Some news media giving false information to influence political opinions and spreading untrue information to fool the audiences and creating confusion, violence among general people.

Thirdly, creating peer pressure/ jealousy among the people (Example) Some of my friends they are born with silver spoon and they lavishly flaunt their sophisticated lifestyle on Instagram reels so these had impacted me a lot and made me to lose confidence in myself and even questioned my existence born in middle class family because of lifestyle my friends lead. But Later when I realized that my friends was leading a superficial life and in real life her family is going through huge financial crisis. She was just fooling everybody through reel life just to gain views, followers in very dishonest way. Soon it made me realized that whatever we see in social media is not real. some people fake their identity and some people just want to earn quick money so they keep fooling people on Internet. I am very thankful to my parents and god for the awareness about networking and keeping me safe healthy.

To summarize, there are numerous way to make ourself more aware of internet usage like tracking how many hours we have spend scrolling through Uoutube, twitter, Instagram in our mobile. Government and Conglomerate should come together to create safe guidelines and Principles for the audiences to know both good and bad side effects of networking. At the end, it is up to the general consumer to take initiative role.

[isha]

Information Technology usage has shot up since the pandemic. Here we are going to highlights some of risk internet pose towards individuals and how social media have bad influence on the community. These days internet usage has lead to increased loneliness, anxiety, peer pressure, false information leading to violence between different religion.

First and foremost, social media has a huge negative impact on creativity. These days, school kids or adults have a reduced ability to create ideas, think, or analyse information properly. (Example) These days most of school kids have easy access to any websites for school assignments but a decade back school kids and adults goes to Library to read, gather information from authorized source only.

First and foremost, social media has a profound negative impact on creativity. Nowadays, both school children and adults have a reduced ability to generate ideas, think critically, and analyze information properly. For instance, in the past, school children and adults had to visit libraries to access authorized sources for their assignments. However, nowadays, they have easy access to any website, which may not always provide reliable information. – How is this related to social media use?

Secondly, misinformation about the real world, for example: Some news media give false information to influence political opinions and spread untrue information to fool audiences, creating confusion, violence among general people.

– Clarity and Coherence:
Some sentences in the essay lack clarity and coherence. Paragraphing and structure should be right.

-Language Usage:
The essay would benefit from more precise and formal language. Some
sentences contain informal or colloquial language that may reduce the
overall academic tone. For example, “These days most of school kids have
easy access to any websites for school assignments” could be revised as
“Currently, many schoolchildren have unrestricted access to a wide
range of websites for their academic assignments.”

– Grammatical errors.

Bands – 3/6

[Sunny]

Many people have the opinion, that social networking sites are not helpful and have a bad impact on individuals and groups of people, I completely disagree with this opinion that social media is not useful and has a negative impact. In further detail, I will discuss the positive impact of social media for everyone.

Nowadays, due to social networking, communication is much more faster, easier and effective. for example, due to advance technology people can smoothly transfer the information throughout the globe within a second and due the awareness of it. It also helps other several industries to develop and make it more comfortable and beneficial for common people, like transportation, traveling, news and make more in just once click.

Moreover, there are some major positive impact also which helps the world more connected and updated, such as nowadays, any student can take any type of education and information very easily and in lesser cost and free also, which help them to grow their knowledge and carrier, and after the pandemic people know the power of the social networking and benefits of it, but there are some minor impact of it, like people are wasting their time on it and not focusing on it productive thing as these type of thing are there which can be ignore or change it into positivity.

However, proper use of social networking and technology for everyone in the globe can be very helpful and can eliminate the negative impact.

[isha]

Many people have the opinion, that social networking sites are not helpful and have a bad impact on individuals and groups of people, I completely disagree with this opinion that social media is not useful and has a negative impact. In further detail, I will discuss the positive impact of social media for everyone.

Nowadays, due to social networking, communication is much faster, easier, and more effective, for example, due to advanced technology, people can smoothly transfer information throughout the globe within a second. It also helps several other industries to develop and make it more comfortable and beneficial for common people, like transportation, travelling, news, and more, with just one click.

Moreover, there are some major positive impacts that help the world become more connected and updated, such as the fact that nowadays, any student can take any type of education and information very easily, at a lesser cost, and for free, which helps them grow their knowledge and careers. After the pandemic, people knew the power of social networking and the benefits of it, but there were some minor impacts, like people wasting their time on it and not focusing on productive things.

However, proper use of social networking and technology for everyone in the globe can be very helpful and can eliminate the negative impact.

– You need to provide more reasons and a comprehensive conclusion, word cound is less than 250.

– Grammatical errors and spelling mistakes.

Bands – 3/6

[Anushka]

Without a doubt, new technologies or what we can call social networking sites have impacted communications as well as relationships in many ways. From my perspective, it cannot be denied that social media these days has created a lot more negative impact than a positive one. Therefore, I am going to reflect my own view of such an issue in order to confirm my argument through this essay.

First and foremost, Social media exposes young children and adolescents to unrealistic standards that might force them to push themselves to a certain unnecessary extent. For instance, if a person uses filters that can make their skin brighter or clearer- with these tools anyone can become easy on the eyes, however that is not the real life. People when see all this on social media tend to believe all of this to be true and they can start having impractical expectations from themselves. This can often lead to body dysmorphia or even self-esteem issues.

Secondly, social media can create a false pretence, for not just kids but adults as well. It is extremely easy for everyone to anonymous on the internet and hence this can cause some serious security issues. It can basically open doors for predators.

To summarize, In my opinion social media is a powerful tool for the world to connect with each other. However it is imperative that it is used in a way that does not cause harm to anyone.

[isha]

Without a doubt, new technologies, or what we can call social networking sites, have impacted communications as well as relationships in many ways. From my perspective, it cannot be denied that social media these days has created a lot more negative impact than positive. Therefore, I am going to reflect my own view of such an issue in order to confirm my argument through this essay.

First and foremost, Social media exposes young children and adolescents to unrealistic standards that might force them to push themselves to a certain unnecessary extent. For instance, if a person uses filters that can make their skin brighter or clearer, with these tools anyone can become easier on the eyes; however, that is not real life. People who see all this on social media tend to believe all of this to be true, and they can start having impractical expectations of themselves. This can often lead to body dysmorphia or even self-esteem issues.

Secondly, social media can create a false pretence for not just kids but adults as well. It is extremely easy for everyone to remain anonymous on the internet, and this can cause some serious security issues. It can basically open doors for predators.

To summarise, In my opinion, social media is a powerful tool for the world to connect with each other. However, it is imperative that it is used in a way that does not cause harm to anyone.

Nice attempt.

Make use of punctuation marks at right places.

Word count is less than 250. Elaborate your 2nd body paragraph.

Bands -3.5/6