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    Posted by Anureet on August 14, 2021 at 10:16 AM

    A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

    Write a letter to the company. In your letter

    1) describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team

    2) summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts

    3) say how you think the company should spend the money

    Begin your letter as follows:

    Dear Sir or Madam

    Anureet replied 2 years, 8 months ago 6 Members · 12 Replies
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  • Abhineet

    August 14, 2021 at 10:48 AM

    Dear Sir,

    It is a great pleasure for me to write this letter to your company regarding the helping hand that you have proposed for the poor children in my locality.

    First I would like to highlight the benefits of sponsoring the local children’s sports team for a significant period probably two years. As we know that Sports is a culture in our society and it needs a regulated infrastructure with adequate training to support. So the children who are unable to afford, can certainly get the maximum benefit out of it. I have sincerely noticed that children in my society have the caliber to reach greater height specially in the field of Cricket and hence they can do wonders provided they get plenty of resources.

    Meanwhile I also observed that there is a set of children who are very much fond of music. They are full of enthusiasm when it comes to singing, playing some variety of music instruments or participate in some open-air concerts. They follow the people from the music industry and watch their concerts on Television. This bold initiative to sponsor them will help them into nourishing their skills which are natural and God-gifted to them. I certainly feel that they have the ability to perform on a bigger stage after a period of time.

    To initiate these charitable works, I would suggest that kindly form a group of people who can visit my locality and meet with these children. They would be delighted to have you here and would share their thoughts with the group. Thereafter you can get a fair idea on how ambitious these kids are and they simply needs a helping hand to give heights to there wings. I myself along with my co-workers are representing their team and we can meet each other to discuss the strategies and the plans to start this great initiative.

    I hope to hear you soon on this kind initiative.

    Yours Sincerely,

    Abhineet Saxena

    • Anureet

      August 15, 2021 at 6:23 PM

      BP 1: Sports: sports

      sincerely noticed- noticed

      reach greater height- reach great heights

      BP 2: very much- very

      some- a

      participate- participation

      into- in

      I hope to hear you soon- I hope to hear from you soon

      BAND SCORE: 2/3 Keep Writing!

  • Madhumitha

    August 14, 2021 at 2:08 PM

    Dear Sir

    I am writting to express my appreciation on your company’s initiative of sponsoring either our community’s sports team for children or arranging open air concerts for local people.

    Undoubtedly, your support for the sports team would help them get better training, therefore, there are more chances of victory in the upcoming leagues. This would not only bring fame to our area and your company but also attract more sponsors in the future.

    On the other hand, your company’s idea of organising open-air concerts would certainly entertain people of all age groups. Besides, it gives an opportunity for the local bands to show case their talent. Thus, many young people could get inspired and motivated to develop interest in such cultural activities.

    However, I personally feel that spending on promoting children’s sports would be a better option. Because, financially backward students, who cannot afford to take special trainings can participate under your sponsorship.

    I look forward to receive a positive reply from your end.

    Yours faithfully,

    Madhumitha Murali

    • Anureet

      August 15, 2021 at 6:29 PM

      appreciation- this letter is not about appreciation

      BP1: there are- there will be

      BP 2: it gives- it can give

      opportunity for- opportunity to

      BP 3: under- with the help of your

      Please check the word count if its under word count

      BAND SCORE: 2.5/3 Keep Writing!

  • Sumita

    August 15, 2021 at 12:13 AM

    Dear Sir or Madam

    I am extremely delighted while writing this letter to your company regarding your amazing initiatives to support local children by either sponsoring local sports team or by paying for two open-air concerts.

    Firstly, I would like to talk about advantages of sponsoring local football team for a longer period of 2 years. Currently, our area doesn’t have adequate sports infrastructure and training facilities, also existing sports training are very expensive and limited making it unaffordable for mostly children especially poor. Hence, you company’s support will provide the much needed boost to sports culture in our tier 2 city, condition of football grounds will get improved significantly and ultimately it will generate outstanding sportspersons from localities.

    On the other hand, I have also come across some of extremely talented children in music and I have seen some of them singing and playing wide variety of instruments such as guitar, violin, ukulele, drums etc. in local restaurants and local functions. Organizing open air concerts can give them a platform to showcase their talents to a wide variety of audience and it might open up further future opportunities for them.

    I would like to make suggestion regarding the methodology to decide which initiative should be sponsored. We must organize some of sports matches along with community level singing and music competition so that localities can easily assess the talent of these children and then all the members can vote for the activity they prefer, and of course majority wins. Also, these local meetings can be used as suggestion grounds for planning strategies for the preferred initiative.

    I am really excited about these initiatives and looking forward to receive a positive reply at your end.

    Yours sincerely,


    • Anureet

      August 15, 2021 at 6:39 PM

      Shared feedback

  • Suraj

    August 15, 2021 at 1:10 PM

    Dear Sir or Madam,

    I am writing as a response to the feedback requested by your company for whether it should use the allocated sum to conduct two open air concerts or support a local children’s sports team for two years.

    As the local children’s sport teams are not encouraged generally and are in need of the funds, they will be grateful to any help provided and advertise the company in any way they can. While the reach of a local sports team is limited, the promotion would be stable and periodic leading to long term benefits superseding the short term loss of reach.

    On the other hand, paying for open air concerts would bring your company into the limelight and capture the attention of a vast number of people as the audience would not be limited to the local people but also include many foreigners.

    I would like to suggest your company to support the local children’s sports team as it would encourage children to sport and throw a positive light on your famous name. Moreover, as a large company whose name is widely spread, a stable local promotion would be more beneficial than a short term wide reach that concerts can provide.

    I look forward to participate in any future events of your esteemed organization.

    Yours faithfully,

    Suraj Parsi

    • Suraj

      August 15, 2021 at 1:12 PM

      I took 30 mins to write this down.
      Please suggest me any tips to shorten the span.

      • Anureet

        August 15, 2021 at 6:12 PM

        plan your letter beforehand

    • Anureet

      August 15, 2021 at 6:43 PM

      OPENING STATEMENT: for whether: on whether

      BAND SCORE: 2.5/3 Keep Writing!

  • jaidheesh

    August 16, 2021 at 3:46 PM

    Dear Sir or Madam,

    This is regarding the philanthropic work your company is willing to do for our town and help you decide where to donate your money.

    Our local children’s sports team is in dire need of financial support. It is very evident that our town’s schools lack proper infrastructure and have a shortage of funds. We all are aware that these children are very capable and with the right training, equipment and facilities they can perform at a very competitive level.

    On another aspect, our town is known for its lack of vibe partially due to the absence of concerts and other fun activities for the people to be involved in. By sponsoring open-air concerts, the people would be delighted and also making our town livelier and more vibrant. Moreover, the fame will put our town’s name on top of the list and your company will be benefited by the visitors and tourists that come to visit it.

    In my opinion, it would be very much appreciated if you could sponsor the children’s sports team for two years as they are in most need of this support.

    Hope you would consider my suggestion.

    Yours faithfully

    Ram Singh

    • Anureet

      August 17, 2021 at 9:10 AM

      OPENING STATEMENT: Rewrite it more clearly

      BP2: On another aspect- On the other hand

      for the people: for people

      the people- people

      making- it will make

      BP 3: most need- need

      BAND SCORE: 2/3 Keep Writing!

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