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  • IELTS Academic Task -1 ( Batch B & Batch A)- Bar Chart – Seals Whales & Dolphins

     Vimi updated 6 days, 12 hours ago 8 Members · 15 Posts
  • Vimi

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    September 8, 2021 at 1:33 AM
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    The bar chart below shows numbers of seals, whales and dolphins recorded in the Gormez Straits from 2006 to 2018.

    Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

    Write at least 150 words.

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  • jasleen

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    September 8, 2021 at 6:47 PM
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    The bar chart depicts the number of seals, whales and dolphins present between the year 2006 and 2018 in the Gormez straits.As it can be visualised that the highest number of these amphibians was recorded in latest year i.e. 2018.

    The seals were reported to be almost 43 in year 2006. Following this year, there can be observed a drop in their number by 15 in year 2010. The year of 2014 faced a rise in their number taking the count to 35 and finally, their number outnumbered all the previous figures in year 2018,when seals were reported to be almost 45.

    Coming to whales, whose highest number was recorded in year 2018 and they were least in number in year 2014. In 2006,they were seen to be 23 in number making a rise by 1 or 2 in the year 2010.

    A regular pattern and a constant rise can be observed in case of dolphins. The number of doplhins rose gradually at a constant rate from year 2006 to 2018 with the highest number in latter and least in former.

    • This reply was modified 2 weeks, 2 days ago by  jasleen.
    • Vimi

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      September 11, 2021 at 11:56 PM
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      The bar chart depicts the number of seals, whales and dolphins present between the year 2006 and 2018 in the Gormez straits.As it can be visualised that the highest number of these amphibians was recorded in ( the) latest ( last ) year i.e. 2018.

      The seals were reported to be almost 43 in year 2006. Following this year, there can be observed a drop ( a drop can be observed )in their number by 15 in year 2010. The year of 2014 faced ( witnessed) a rise in their number taking the count to 35 and finally, their number outnumbered all the previous figures in year 2018,when seals were reported to be almost 45.

      Coming to whales, whose highest number was recorded in year 2018 and ( however) they were least in number in year 2014. In 2006,they were seen to be 23 in number making a rise by 1 or 2 in the year 2010.

      A regular pattern and a constant rise can be observed in case of dolphins. The number of doplhins ( dolphins) rose gradually at a constant rate from year 2006 to 2018 with the highest number in latter and least in former (year).

      Observations:

      Pls see the inaccuracies in bold above with corrections in the brackets.

      1. Grouping is not clear.

      2. There should be proper grouping of things showing similar trend and proper comparing and contrasting.

      3. there can be observed a drop ( a drop can be observed )in their number by 15 in year 2010

      4. latest – the last

      Feedback :

      Paraphrasing and general overview are satisfactory but the grouping is unsatisfactory. Language of comparision and contrasting is insufficient as all the amphibians have been described in separate paragraphs. Incorrect sentence formation and use of words has brought ambiguity to the meaning of the sentences. There is limited use of cohesive devices.

      Band Score -1.5/3

  • Anuj

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    September 8, 2021 at 11:48 PM
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    The bar chart depicts the seal, whale, and dolphin population data in Gormez straits from 2006 to 2018. At first glance, it can be seen that the dolphin population has been rising for the past 12 years whilst, the population of seals and whales has been fluctuating from 2006 till 2018.

    In 2006, the Dolphin population stood lowest, it was less than fifty percent of the seal population which was around 42. Furthermore, the difference in population for dolphin and seal population in 2010 was reduced to around 3. By 2018, the dolphin population ended up standing more than 50 thus transcending the seal population which stood near 45.

    A varied trend is observed for the seal and whale population over the 12 years. Although the seal population has risen from about 42 in 2006 to 45 in 2018, significant growth of about 34 could be perceived in the dolphin population from 2006 to 2018. The whale population without much variation ranged between 20 to 30 for all years.

    • Vimi

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      September 11, 2021 at 11:38 PM
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      The bar chart depicts the seal, whale, and dolphin population data in Gormez straits from 2006 to 2018. At first glance, it can be seen that the dolphin population has been rising for the past (throughout the period of) 12 years whilst, the population of seals and whales has been fluctuating (kept fluctuating) from 2006 till 2018.

      In 2006, the Dolphin population stood lowest, it was ( at almost) less than fifty percent of the seal population which was around 42. Furthermore, the difference in population for dolphin and seal population in 2010 was reduced to around 3. By 2018, the dolphin population ended up standing more than 50 thus transcending the seal population which stood near 45.

      A varied trend is observed for the seal and whale population over the 12 years. Although the seal population has risen ( rose) from about 42 in 2006 to 45 in 2018, significant growth of about 34 could be perceived in the dolphin population from 2006 to 2018. The whale population without much variation ranged between 20 to 30 for all (the) years.

      Observations :

      Pls see the inaccuracies above in bold with corrections in the brackets.

      1. Tense should be past throughout as the graph is in the past.

      2. In 2006, the Dolphin population stood lowest, it was ( at almost) less – In this sentence ‘it was’ is not required and should be omitted.

      Feedback:

      Well attempted! The response achieves the task because the data from the bar chart is selected and summarized appropriately. Also, it can be seen that comparisons are made, which you are told to do in the rubric. The comparisons are clear from language of comparison and contrast. The summary is also well-organized. The task is well structured with good number of cohesive devices however Grammar errors especially use of incorrect tenses limits the score.

      Band Score : 1.5/3

  • Shana

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    September 9, 2021 at 4:10 PM
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    The bar chart represents the population of seals ,whales and dolphins that were prevalent in the Gormez Straits in four distinct years- 2006, 2010 2014 and 2018.Broadly speaking, the largest number of these creatures was witnessed in the final year.

    Seals, which were the most abundant among the three in 2006 at nearly 42 in number ,experienced a sudden fall by about 15 in the following year with its population hitting at a value almost equal to that of whales and dolphins.Thereafter ,the number of seals increased steadily to about 45 by 2018 .

    In 2006, there were approximately 25 whales in the Gormez Strait which managed to remain steady at a figure between 20 and 30 with only minor fluctuations over the period.

    However, dolphins exhibited a dramatic rise in their numbers throughout the period; it started off from its lowest figure of approximately 18 in 2006 and then increased by about 34 to reach the peak in 2018.

    • Vimi

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      September 12, 2021 at 12:07 AM
      60 Network Points
      Activity Points 3130

      The bar chart represents the population of seals ,whales and dolphins that were prevalent in the Gormez Straits in four distinct years- 2006, 2010 2014 and 2018.Broadly speaking, the largest number of these creatures was witnessed in the final year.

      Seals, which were the most abundant among the three in 2006 at nearly 42 in number ,experienced a sudden fall by about 15 in the following year with its population hitting at a value almost equal to that of whales and dolphins. Thereafter ,the number of seals increased steadily to about 45 by 2018 .

      In 2006, there were approximately 25 whales in the Gormez Strait which managed to remain steady at a figure between 20 and 30 with only minor fluctuations over the period.

      However, dolphins exhibited a dramatic rise in their numbers throughout the period; it started off from its lowest figure of approximately 18 in 2006 and then increased by about 34 to reach the peak in 2018.

      Feedback:

      Though the paraphrasing and general overview are satisfactory, the grouping could have been improved. Use of lexical resource is fine though use of comparisions and contrasts are limited. Organization and structure could have been improved.

      Band Score : 2/3

  • Bhagyashree

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    September 12, 2021 at 8:00 PM
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    This bar graph provides information for the population of marine animals in Gormez straits between 2006 to 2018. Overall, there is an increase in the number of these marine animals by the end of the period with minor fluctations seen for Seals and Whales.

    In 2006, Seals inhibiting the Gormez strait witnessed around 42 in number. However for the year 2010 it dramatically declined to almost 25 in number which was still high than dolphins for that year. Thereafter, Seals population steadily increased seeing a growth of almost 20 in number by the end of 2018.

    Whales, started at 25 in number for the year 2006 experiencing a minor growth by 2. Then it again declined and showed a sudden increase by almost a third in the year 2018.

    Whereas for Dolphins it started at an all time low as compared to other two mammals but it kept growing at a steady rate reaching the highest of more than a half in 2018.

    • Vimi

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      September 18, 2021 at 11:38 PM
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      This bar graph provides information for the population of marine animals in Gormez straits between 2006 to 2018. Overall, there is an increase in the number of these marine animals by the end of the period with minor fluctations (fluctuations) seen for Seals and Whales.

      In 2006, Seals inhibiting (inhabiting) the Gormez strait (were) witnessed around 42 in number. However for the year 2010 it dramatically declined to almost 25 in number which was still high (higher) than dolphins for that year. Thereafter, Seals population steadily increased seeing a growth of almost 20 in number by the end of 2018.

      Whales, started (were seen ) at (around) 25 in number for the year 2006 experiencing a minor growth by 2 ( in the year 2010). Then it again declined and showed a sudden increase by almost a third ( to end a little under 30) in the year 2018.

      Whereas for Dolphins it started at an all time low ( it was the lowest ) as compared to ( among the ) other two mammals but it kept growing at a steady rate reaching the highest of more than a half in 2018.

      Observations:

      Please see the corrections above in bold.

      1. Inhibition- hesitation whereas inhabiting – living

      2. Witnessed means to experience or see …………… Seals were seen to be (witnessed)

      3. Higher than

      4. For superlative degrees like highest/ lowest etc. we generally use among.

      Feedback:

      The writing is presented in a satisfactory format. Paraphrasing and general overview is ok. Language of comparison and contrast has been used incorrectly in some places. Grammar inaccuracies are seen in active /passive, adjectives etc., though they are not significant. Incorrect use of vocabulary is also evident in some places.

      Band Score: 2/3

  • akanksha

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    September 13, 2021 at 6:31 PM
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    The bar graph depicts the population of inhabitants of the Gormez Straits namely Seals, Dolphins, and Whales from the year 2006 to 2018. Overall, it can be seen that the population of seals and dolphins kept on increasing at a steady rate with a slight downfall in between the 12 years.

    The population of Seals in the year 2006 was the highest at around 42 and it decreased by half in the year 2010 to around 22. The population of Dolphins in the year 2006 was nearly at 18 slightly less than the population of whales but it significantly increased to 21 in the year 2010. From 2014 to 2018 the population of seals increased from about 35 in the year 2014 to around 45 in 2018 nearly a 10% increase. And the population of dolphins sharply increased from 32 in 2014 to about 52 in 2018 and it was the highest ever population recorded for dolphins throughout the years.

    The population of whales showed a similar trend throughout the given period. In 2006 the population of whales was half that of seals around 23, it slightly increased to 25 in the year 2010and after a gradual decrease in the year 2014 it increased to around 28 in the year 2018.

    • Vimi

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      September 18, 2021 at 11:54 PM
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      Activity Points 3130

      The bar graph depicts the population of inhabitants of the Gormez Straits namely Seals, Dolphins, and Whales from the year 2006 to 2018. Overall, it can be seen that the population of seals and dolphins kept on increasing at a steady rate with a slight downfall in between the 12 years.

      The population of Seals in the year 2006 was the highest at around 42 and it decreased by half in the year 2010 to around 22. The population of Dolphins in the year 2006 was nearly at 18 slightly less than the population of whales but it significantly increased to (around) 21 in the year 2010. From 2014 to 2018 the population of seals increased from about 35 in the year 2014 to around 45 in 2018 nearly a 10% increase . And (however,) the population of dolphins sharply increased from 32 in 2014 to about 52 in 2018 and it was the highest ever population recorded for dolphins throughout the years.

      The population of whales showed a similar trend throughout the given period. In 2006 the population of whales was (about)half that of seals around 23, it slightly increased to ( about) 25 in the year 2010and after a gradual decrease in the year 2014 it increased to around 28 in the year 2018.

      Observations:

      Please see the corrections above in bold.

      Feedback:

      Good effort has been made to answer the question and describe the main points in the chart. General overview and paraphrasing is satisfactory. Though the values are not exact and hence words like nearly, about etc., needs to be used before values. The writing progresses logically and the trends have been described well. Language of comparison and contrast has been used throughout though limited use of cohesive devices limits its score

      Band Score: 2/3

  • Dr Shravan

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    September 13, 2021 at 8:01 PM
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    The Bar Graph is depicting the strength of Seals Whales & Dolphins form a period of 2006 to 2018 in Gormez Straits. The Dolphins have become maximum in numbers by the end of 2018 however whales number remains almost steady throughout in the same time lap.

    The Dolphins were below 20 with least numbers in 2006 But they showed a steady rise outnumbering whales around 2014 and by 2018 they overpassed Seals to attain maximum strength which is slightly above 50.

    The Seals were Highest in count in 2006 , slightly more than 40. But then they showed a dramatic decline till 2010 Thereafter again experienced a positive surge crossing both whales & Dolphins in 2014 and by 2018 they reaches almost 45 which is still below Dolphins

    In the meantime The Whales remained fluctuating between 20 to 30 so by the end of period they were Least in number which is slightly below 30

    • Vimi

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      September 19, 2021 at 12:24 AM
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      The Bar Graph is depicting the strength of Seals (,) Whales & Dolphins (from)a period of 2006 to 2018 in Gormez Straits. The Dolphins have become (became) maximum in numbers( number) by the end of 2018 however whales number remains (remained)almost steady throughout in the same time lap (period).

      The Dolphins were below 20 with least numbers in 2006 But (but) they showed a steady rise outnumbering whales around 2014 and by 2018 they overpassed (surpassed)Seals to attain maximum strength which is (was) slightly above 50.

      The Seals were Highest (highest) in count in 2006 , slightly more than 40. But then they showed a dramatic decline till 2010 Thereafter again experienced a positive surge crossing both whales & Dolphins in 2014 and by 2018 they reaches ( reached) almost 45 which is (was) still below Dolphins

      In the meantime The ( the)Whales remained fluctuating between 20 to 30 so by the end of period they were Least (least) in number which is (was)slightly below 30.

      Feedback:

      Please rewrite this as there are lot of Grammar errors. The entire writing has to be in the past and you have used present tense in most of the places. Apart from this there are words starting with capital letters in the middle of the sentences.

  • Tuhinsuvra

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    September 14, 2021 at 12:36 PM
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    The bar chart illustrates the population of Seal, Whale and Dolphin in the Gormez Straits from 2006 to 2018.

    Overall, the Dolphin population increased at a steady rate whilst the seal and whale numbers fluctuated over the period.

    In the starting year, seal population outraced the other two then 4 years later its number plummeted and stood at 25. From the bar graph, it is clearly discernible that the three populations had come to the same range only in 2010 and stood at 25, 26 and 21 in the sequence of Seals, Whales and Dolphins. Post the 2010, Seal and Dolphin experienced a rapid surge till the end of the period while the number of whales declined and after 2014, it again started climbing up and reached its all-time highest which is nearly 29.

    The Dolphin population had always been in soaring phase. Over the 12 years of observation, it increased threefold and finally touched the pinnacle at 51 in 2018.

    Word count: 162

    • Vimi

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      September 19, 2021 at 12:11 AM
      60 Network Points
      Activity Points 3130

      The bar chart illustrates the population of Seal, Whale and Dolphin in the Gormez Straits from 2006 to 2018.

      Overall, the Dolphin population increased at a steady rate whilst the seal and whale numbers fluctuated over the period.

      In the starting year (2006), seal (Seal) population outraced the other two then (though) 4 years later its number plummeted and stood at (about)25 (in 2010). From the bar graph, it is clearly discernible that the three populations had come to the same range only in 2010 and stood at (approximately) 25, 26 and 21 in the sequence of Seals, Whales and Dolphins. Post the 2010, Seal and Dolphin experienced a rapid surge till the end of the period while the number of whales declined and after 2014, it again started climbing up and reached its all-time highest (high) which is(was) nearly 29.

      The Dolphin population had always been in soaring phase. Over the 12 years of observation, it increased threefold and finally touched the pinnacle at (about) 51 in 2018.

      Word count: 162

      Observations:

      Please see the corrections above in bold.

      1. Please mention years when describing specifics.

      2. The values are not exact so do not forget to use words like about,nearly etc., before the numbers.

      3. All time high – not all time highest

      Feedback:

      Well attempted. Paraphrase and general overview are satisfactory though the language of comparison and contrast could have been improved. Paragraphs flow logically with a proper progression. Cohesive devices have been very rarely used. Vocabulary range is also limited. Apart from this a few Grammar errors of verbs, adjectives and capital letter are seen in the task.

      Band Score: 2/3

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