[sheena]

Nowadays, kids at the age of 3 to 6 are sent to school for legitimate reasons, but few people propose to begin schooling only after 7 years. I support commencing education as early as possible and this essay will discuss both aspects, justifying the argument to start education at an early age.

Indeed, it is very easy for toddlers to learn new concepts and adapt to new environment compared to older children due to their faster brain development. They are curious, highly energetic and often it becomes difficult for parents to help and nurture them effectively. Schools teach discipline, nourish language abilities, enhance analytical and logical skills in a professional way compared to the tactics of inexperienced parents. For instance, learning disabilities like dyslexia or autism can be quickly identified by trained staffs and may be corrected if found in advance.

On the other hand, children should not be forced to learn multiple things as each student is unique and takes his/her time to learn. Overburdening them with home works and exams is not a good idea which will unnecessarily induce stress and anxiety for students and family. Furthermore, younger ones would not have learnt to express themselves and convey the issues or problems they go through. Hence it is important that parents spend time with kids rather than relying on outsiders.

In conclusion, though there are some cons in sending children to educational institutions early, it can bring positive impact on them if institutions are able to balance the emotional needs of each pupil. Hence, I encourage the idea to ensure systematic coaching in advance.

[isha]

Nowadays, kids at the age of 3 to 6 are sent to school for legitimate reasons, but few people propose to begin schooling only after 7 years. I support commencing education as early as possible, and this essay will discuss both aspects, justifying the argument for starting education at an early age.

Indeed, it is very easy for toddlers to learn new concepts and adapt to new environment compared to older children due to their faster brain development. They are inquisitive and energetic, and it can be difficult for parents to help and nurture them effectively. Schools teach discipline, nourish language abilities, and enhance analytical and logical skills in a professional way compared to the tactics of inexperienced parents. For instance, learning disabilities like dyslexia or autism can be quickly identified by trained staff and may be corrected if found in advance.

On the other hand, children should not be forced to learn multiple things, as each student is unique and takes his/her time to learn. Overburdening them with home work and exams is not a good idea, which will unnecessarily induce stress and anxiety for students and their families. Furthermore, younger ones (take time to express themselves) would not have learnt to express themselves and convey the issues or problems they go through. Hence, it is important that parents spend time with kids rather than relying on outsiders.

In conclusion, though there are some cons in sending children to educational institutions early, it can have a positive impact on them if institutions are able to balance the emotional needs of each pupil. Hence, I encourage the idea of ensuring systematic coaching in advance.

Feedback:

-Introduction and BP 1 is fine. Clarity and paraphrasing is there in the intro.

– BP2 topic sentence and concluding lines of same paragraph are not in sync.

-Conclusion can be more clear .

– Use some not so common vocabulary words.

Bands – 4/6

[Nikita]

There are individuals who consider the correct schooling age for kids to be a very young one, while others believe that 7 years should be the minimum age for attending proper school. We will look at both sides of this topic in this essay, with my side arguing that toddlers should begin their educational journey at a young age.

There are parents who prefer to teach their younglings at home in their early years and send them to schools after 7. These people believe that kids should first learn values and manners at home before going to an educational institution. The belief is that this will help the child to behave and maintain proper code of conduct because the child has already been taught about the basics at home.

On the other hand, there are people who believe that schooling should be started at an early age. I support this statement as this provides the child a place to grow in a new surroundings during the period his/ her brain growth and development is occurring. Children starts getting their answers to every question in the age they are most inquisitive about things. In school, students make friends at an early age, starts socialising and learn how to do several things from each other. They tend to listen and obey their teachers unlike at homes where they become careless and sometimes do not listen to their parents.

In conclusion, according to my perspective kids should be sent to schools at an early age for their overall growth in every sector. Furthermore, individuals considering to teach their children at homes till 7 years of age, should either make their base very strong in home education or else they should not waste their years and send them to schools.There are individuals who consider the correct schooling age for kids to be a very young one, while others believe that 7 years should be the minimum age for attending proper school. We will look at both sides of this topic in this essay, with my side arguing that toddlers should begin their educational journey at a young age.
There are parents who prefer to teach their younglings at home in their early years and send them to schools after 7. These people believe that kids should first learn values and manners at home before going to an educational institution. The belief is that this will help the child to behave and maintain proper code of conduct because the child has already been taught about the basics at home.
On the other hand, there are people who believe that schooling should be started at an early age. I support this statement as this provides the child a place to grow in a new surroundings during the period his/ her brain growth and development is occurring. Children starts getting their answers to every question in the age they are most inquisitive about things. In school, students make friends at an early age, starts socialising and learn how to do several things from each other. They tend to listen and obey their teachers unlike at homes where they become careless and sometimes do not listen to their parents.
In conclusion, according to my perspective kids should be sent to schools at an early age for their overall growth in every sector. Furthermore, individuals considering to teach their children at homes till 7 years of age, should either make their base very strong in home education or else they should not waste their years and send them to schools.

[isha]

There are individuals who consider the correct schooling age for kids to be a very young one, while others believe that 7 years should be the minimum age for attending a proper school. In this essay, we will look at both sides of this topic, with my side arguing that toddlers should begin their educational journey at a young age.

There are parents who prefer to teach their younglings at home in their early years and send them to schools after 7. These people believe that kids should first learn values and manners at home before going to an educational institution. The belief is that this will help the child behave and maintain proper code of conduct because the child has already been taught the basics at home.

On the other hand, there are people who believe that schooling should be started at an early age. I support this statement as it provides the child a place to grow in a new environment during the period his/ her brain growth and development is occurring. Children start getting their answers to every question at the age when they are most inquisitive about things. In school, students make friends at an early age, start socialising and learn how to do several things from each other. They tend to listen and obey their teachers, unlike at home where they become careless and sometimes do not listen to their parents.

In conclusion, according to my perspective, kids should be sent to school at an early age for their overall growth in every sector. Furthermore, individuals considering teaching their children at home until the age of seven should either build a strong foundation in home education or avoid wasting their years by sending them to school.

-Nice work.

-Avoid repeating same words.

-Work on lexical resources.

Bands – 4/6