[Nidhi]

I completely disagree that higher salary is often considered rather than job satisfaction. Money can make you happy and can cure your problems but once done with that it puts your head to contemplate on a job that brings content in addition to zest, vigour and curiosity within. For instance if entrepreneurs or athletes would have considered money over their ideas, efforts and trust in oneself over money them might have ended taking corporate jobs. Satisfying job can demand risk and belief within over money, a powerful and influential weapon yet cannot bring that content when you succeed in that job. Your conscience is unpalatable above money.

Points: Job satisfaction- zest, curiosity, risk for content, believe in ourselves

[NIL Admin]

You need to write with a full structure in mind, there has to be an introduction which contains the paraphrasing of the question as well as a thesis statement which is your explicit opinion. You need to work upon your conditional sentences that we will cover in the class. There is nothing much I can say because of the short length of your writing.

[Nilesh]

The perception of number of people is big fat salaries provides more satisfaction over the job satisfaction. I am strongly condemn about this thought.

First of all, money is not everything in our life. Yes, you can buy anything with the money but unable to buy self satisfaction. If you are not happy with your job that you are doing, it means that you are not performing well & effective work utilization is less. The attitude is not beneficial for individual as well as to the employer. The same argument has been proved by national labor organizations. According to this organization, productivity of the worker is directly proportional to the mental satisfactions of the worker associated with job.

High salaries can give you happiness only once in the month on your salary day but rest of 29 days are like punishment. It has only short term benefits. I have seen number these kind of people whose bank balance are good but always feel tensed and compromised with his conscience. This job frustration definitely tend to have negative impact on the family.

In my conclusion, Job satisfaction plays positive & important role in the life of the individual. This always has prolonged benefits over short term benefits.

[NIL Admin]

The perception of number of people is big fat salaries provides (no s) more satisfaction over the job satisfaction. I am(I) strongly condemn about this thought.

First of all, money is not everything in our life. Yes, you can buy anything with the(not needed) money but (you are) unable to buy self satisfaction. If you are not happy with your job that you are doing, it means that you are not performing well & effective work utilization is less. The attitude is not beneficial for individual as well as to the employer. The same argument has been proved by national labor organizations. According to this organization, productivity of the worker is directly proportional to the mental satisfactions of the worker associated with job.

High salaries can give you happiness only once in the month on your salary day but rest of 29 days are like punishment. It has only short term benefits. I have seen number (of) these kind(s) of people whose bank balance are good but always feel tensed and compromised with his (their)conscience. This job frustration definitely tend to have negative impact on the family.

In my conclusion, Job satisfaction plays positive & important role in the life of the individual. This always has prolonged benefits over short term benefits.

Feedback:

Look at the grammatical errors pointed out. These are very simple errors that you should not be committing. The introduction and conclusion paragraph for decent enough. First body paragraph also maintained the structure but the second body paragraph did not do justice to your reasoning. You need to try and keep the length of both body paragraphs similar. The second body paragraph did not start with a cohesive device. You can work to make the sentence is more complex and include a few good vocabulary words there.

[Shoaib Nawaz]

As I believe that job satisfaction is more important than earning a big salary, although a big salary provides us more opportunity to improve our living standards. I disagree with the statement that a big salary is more important than job satisfaction. my justification against arguments is given below

First, I would like to explain that the people who are satisfied with their jobs that enjoy their golden time with peace of mind and stay healthy like professional and skillful individuals like doctors, engineers, artists, musicians, etc. as compared to the people who are driving themselves to earn more money, mostly we have seen that their lives remained to disturb due to hypertension, depression, and other health issues. For example, A skilled worker who is earning a reasonable salary against his time and efforts with ultimate satisfaction. He enjoyed his life more than the person who is earning a big salary like giving an example of the Managerial position in the bank who is owning a lot of responsibility to fulfill his duties and obligations at timely manner, usually, we have seen that these people are taking more pressure, tension, and depression. Another example of people who are working in the capital market, they are earning big salaries but take a lot of tension and pressure to manage the equity stock and forex trading

However, I am concluding my discussion with the strong belief that job satisfaction is giving us more pleasure and joyful time as compared to earn a big salary that makes our lives miserable with depression and hypertension.

[NIL Admin]

As I believe that job satisfaction is more important than earning a big salary, although a big salary provides us more opportunity to improve our living standards. I disagree with the statement that a big salary is more important than job satisfaction. my justification against arguments is given below. (Although a big salary provides us more opportunity to improve our living standards, as I believe the job satisfaction is more important than earning a big salary, I disagree with the statement completely.)

First, I would like to explain that the people who are satisfied with their jobs that (they) enjoy their golden time with peace of mind and stay healthy like professional and skillful individuals like(such as) doctors, engineers, artists, musicians, etc. as compared to the people who are driving themselves to earn more money, mostly we have seen that their lives remained to (be) disturbed due to hypertension, depression, and other health issues. For example, A skilled worker who is earning a reasonable salary against his time and efforts with ultimate satisfaction, he enjoyed (s) his life more than the person who is earning a big salary like giving an example of the Managerial position in the bank who is owning(who owns) a lot of responsibility to fulfill his duties and obligations at timely manner, usually, we have seen that these people are taking more pressure, tension, and depression. Another example of people who are working in the capital market, they are earning big salaries but take a lot of tension and pressure to manage the equity stock and forex trading

However, I am concluding my discussion with the strong belief that job satisfaction is giving (gives us)us more pleasure and joyful time as compared to earn(ing) a big salary that makes our lives miserable with depression and hypertension.

Feedback:

Pay attention to the grammatical errors mentioned and pointed out in the writing. The introduction paragraph is not according to the structure, you should never start with your opinion start with the paraphrasing of the question and give your opinion at the end of the introduction.

Apart from that you needed to make to body paragraphs instead you just put everything in one body paragraph which is not the right way to do things. You will lose points in your structure.

You could do more with the lexical resources by incorporating a few more good vocabulary words.

[Vamsi Krishna]

Many people think earning high is necessary for a good lifestyle rather than work pleasure. I strongly disagree with peace of work has less priority than high package job.

First of all, we can’t buy everything with money like good health and happiness, where you work with no weight on you is a better place to work happily like what you want to do. It helps you and your organization, where if you are working for a big company for a huge amount have always stress on you to complete the task in time. For example, sometimes you have to work even on weekends or holidays because your payroll is high and the manager is expecting a lot from you. But in the case of those who work what they like finish job in time and enjoy their free time.

Secondly, accompanying family and friends in leisure are very prime. If you have time, only you can spend with them, in profitable work, you have less time because you have to work hard to achieve the given task. On the other hand, people can complete the task very quickly because of their passion for work and will often enjoy their free time with family and friends.

To conclude, People have to choose their job what they like and what they can do instead of high packages jobs. Yes, a good salary is important to live better, but it is not always the same sometimes you have to realize is it your cup of tea or not.

[NIL Admin]

Many people think earning high is necessary for a good lifestyle rather than work pleasure. I strongly disagree with (the statement that) peace of work has less priority than high package job.

First of all, we can’t buy everything with money like good health and happiness, where you work with no weight on you is a better place to work happily like what you want to do(this sentence is not framed properly). It helps you and your organization, where if you are working for a big company for a huge amount, (you always) have stress on you to complete the task in time. For example, sometimes you have to work even on weekends or holidays because your payroll is high and the manager is expecting a lot from you. But in the case of those who work what they like, finish job in time and enjoy their free time.

Secondly, accompanying family and friends in leisure are very prime(not suitable word). If you have time, only (then) you can spend with them, in profitable work, you have less time because you have to work hard to achieve the given task. On the other hand, people can complete the task very quickly because of their passion for work and will often enjoy their free time with family and friends.

To conclude, People have to choose their job (according to)what they like and what they can do instead of high packages jobs. Yes, a good salary is important to live better, but it is not always the same sometimes you have to realize (whether)is it your cup of tea or not.

Feedback:

Commendable work for the structure and thought process. However quite a few grammatical errors are noted and some of the sentences do not make sense. You need to work upon your sentence structure to arrange your ideas better. You miss a few words in the sentences quite often you need to revise your writing once you’re through with it. Try to use a few more good vocabulary words to fulfil the criteria of lexical resources and also only use the words that you are comfortable with. You made a mistake by using the word prime where it was not supposed to be used.

[Vaibhav]

Some people advocates to opt for professional jobs with huge paycheques even if they are dull and do not fulfill intellectually, however in my opinion, job satisfaction should be the utmost aspect in terms of priority when it comes to job selection for several reasons.

Firstly, unless we are content with the work which we do on daily basis, we cannot excel at it, and hence the further money making in long term is not enduring. To achieve success in life, the most essential resource you need is the kindle, which you can only lit up when you are passionate about your profession, and hence it is imperative to keep focus on profession which excites you. As a matter of fact, career mentors, who have researched on this idea for years say people who opted careers they were eager about not only earned satisfaction but also accumulated great wealth in their life.

Furthermore, investing your precious life in jobs which does not entice you bring along loads of health related concerns. When you work on something which you are not keen about, you tend to get lethargic, stressed, and inactive. As our body, mind and emotions are intertwined, stress creates long term health issues such as joint pain, depression etc. Doctors these days recommend, in order to avoid health problems, individuals should have a charming daily work routine which keeps you active physically as well as psychologically through the day.

To sum up, extra money which does not help you keep a healthy living is anyways a waste; be cautious while selecting a profession and at any given choice go for a profession which arouses curiosity in you, and consequently, it will make you healthy, wealthy and wise.

[NIL Admin]

Some people advocates = advocate.

Job satisfaction should be the utmost priority when it comes to job selection

Don’t use most with essential.

Investing your precious life in jobs which does not=do not

Feedback:

The structuring is excellent you have maintained the integrity of the writing. There are few grammatical errors noted mentioned above. Lexical resources abundant. Conclusion could have been a little better the first sentence in the conclusion does not seem good.

[Aishwarya]

Some people prefer high wages while other prioritise work satisfaction. I completely agree that one need to be at peace with job to be happy in life .

Firstly job satisfaction is crucial for mental tranquility because people become sluggish when they’re not at peace with their work .Moreover ,people become sleepy and less energetic if they are not content ,hence reducing thier productivity which is hazardous both for the company as well as the indivisual. Often life becomes monotonous for such indivisuals ,hence hampering thier success .unsatifaction make people suseptible to depression and they become irritable .For example my friend who worked in Google quit his job to follow his passion in singing and is now happily composing songs in Bollywood ,furthermore he is a well-known name in Indian music industry.

Secondly people often exacerbate the importance of money but actually materialistic things don’t make much difference in the far future .Materialism often promotes a fraudulent life sucking out dreams and aspirations out of people hence leaving them hollow and sad inside ,spiralling into a pit of sadness and depression .for example celebrities who lead a luxurious life are often depressed and anxious hence proving money cannot buy happiness

In conclusion i opine that money cannot buy peace and one need to love his job to progress in every prospect of life therefore it is essential to have job satisfaction for mental peace

[NIL Admin]

Some people prefer high wages while other prioritise work satisfaction. I completely agree that one need to be at peace with job to be happy in life .

Firstly, job satisfaction is crucial for mental tranquility because people become sluggish when they’re not at peace with their work .Moreover ,people become sleepy and less energetic if they are not content ,hence (thus is more appropriate) reducing thier productivity which is hazardous both for the company as well as the indivisual. Often life becomes monotonous for such indivisuals ,hence hampering thier success .unsatifaction (dissatisfaction) make(s) people suseptible to depression and they become irritable .For example my friend who worked in Google quit his job to follow his passion in singing and is now happily composing songs in Bollywood ,furthermore he is a well-known name in Indian music industry.

Secondly people often exacerbate (this word means to make something worse, which is not appropriate here, exaggerate is more appropriate) the importance of money but actually materialistic things don’t make much difference in the far future(long term is better usage) .Materialism often promotes a fraudulent life sucking out dreams and aspirations out of people hence leaving them hollow and sad inside ,spiralling into a pit of sadness and depression .for example celebrities who lead a luxurious life are often depressed and anxious hence proving money cannot buy happiness

In conclusion i opine that money cannot buy peace and one need(s) to love his job (in order) to progress in every prospect of life therefore it is essential to have job satisfaction for mental peace.

Feedback:

It was an excellent work in terms of the sentence construction as well as maintaining the proper structure of the essay. Few grammatical errors are noted which are pointed out. Couple of spelling mistakes are also noted like the word individual and susceptible. You also used a wrong word unsatisfaction, what should be dissatisfaction. Try to proof read everything after you have completed your writing. Excellent use of vocabulary and this is going to get your full marks in lexical resources.

[Eman]

Some people argue that the main thing about any job is to have great a salary while others believe that job gratification is the major matter. In my opinion, I think that having a big salary is more important than job satisfaction for several reasons that I will explain in the following paragraphs.

To begin with, well-paid employees are able to provide their families with more than just the basic life essentials. For example, they can purchase their dream house instead of paying rental because this is considered one of the most required living demands. Another point is that they can start their own business that they are passionate about once they saved enough money for it. To elaborate, an employee who likes cooking, but is working as a teacher, can open his own restaurant and make the most delicious recipes while enjoying it.

On the other hand, staff who are happily working with low income can barely provide their families with the primary life requirements. To illustrate, they are not able to send their kids to the best schools or travel to their home countries annually. Moreover, less-paid laborers can’t enjoy their life because they are constantly working and don’t have the time to spend with their families which can lead to problems with their family members. For instance, working mothers may not have enough time to spend with their children to play with or take care of them because their day is occupied by the work that they are happily doing.

In conclusion, having a big salary is much better than being a happy underpaid employee. Well-paid workers can still enjoy their time after work with their families and friends which is a lot of work satisfied employees don’t get the chance to have mainly because they don’t have enough money.

[Rutul]

To start with, Job satisfaction gives you mental peace, without which one may not be able to perform at their best level. Moreover, one becomes less enthusiastic about their work, which hampers the productivity and creativity of individual. As the work is competitive domain, vicious cycle of dissatisfaction often leads to stress and depression. To illustrate, a good friend of mine doing the job just for the sake of money led to depression and attempt suicide. So, it is very important to be at mental tranquility with the work rather than money.