IELTS Essay Writing: Big SalaryPosted by Abhinav on October 12, 2021 at 8:53 PM
Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree.
Give reasons for your answer and provide relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 Words.
MemberOctober 12, 2021 at 9:45 PM
It is often considered that, having a lucrative career provides more satisfaction than a job that gives a sense of fulfilment. I strongly disagree with this notion. This essay bolsters my statement.
To begin with, money can provide material fulfilment but not self-satisfaction. Nowadays, we see affluent people visiting meditation instructors and psychiatrists people to relieve stress. The most common reason being the inability to handle stress despite having lucrative salaries. Had money being the index for happiness, they wouldn’t have done this. For instance: The majority of my friends have left high paid jobs and started following their passion in order to have a sense of fulfilment.
Secondly, job satisfaction propels career growth in the longer run. when we love what we do, it stimulates our true potential and motivates us to do greater things. For example, The famous meditation instructor “Vishen Lakhiani” has divulged in his landmark book i.e., how he became a successful person by leaving his monotonous job and followed his heart to become a millionaire. In spite of facing a plethora of hurdles.
In short, while money can garner material satisfaction, it cannot provide true happiness which can only be gained by job satisfaction. Besides, if we are perseverant while following our passion, we may face challenges at the initial encounters; however, we can do wonders in the longer run. Therefore, I prefer to choose job satisfaction over a big salary.
AdministratorOctober 12, 2021 at 9:49 PM
Psychiatrist -people- is not required
Salaries are not lucrative jobs are…
Except these mistakes, it is written beautifully. The sentences are constructed with ample complexity. Lexical resources are utilised properly and in relevant places.
Band score weightage: 5.0/6.0
MemberOctober 12, 2021 at 9:48 PM
Job satisfaction of the employee is something which can make a company to touch the sky. But what contribute more in job satisfaction? whether it a big salary package ? or something else? Well, this essay will caste the glimpse on role of big salary for job satisfaction.
The supremacy of a lucrative salary package, in job satisfaction , can not be ignored by anyone and this is the most attractive factor in any segment, which alone is capable enough to pool the talent towards an organization. It is illustrated further that an employee will have to accomplish the various need of his offspring and ménage , and if he is not able to make sufficient earning , then very soon he will become irritate and will start to look for a change.
Secondly , the precedence of good remuneration is always considered a big factor amongst the human capital. The salary is the only thing which assure an worker about his future. in other words , if he receives a good payout , which is sufficient enough for not only to meet his daily requirement but also to be deposited in saving account, his gratification towards the job would be more vivid.
Finally , from the above it may be derived that an employee works for the money and if he do not get a good stipend then obviously he will loose the interest very soon and will start to search for a job, And unequivocally the attrition from a company signals about the un-satisfaction amongst the employee. Thus the role of tantalizing salary package in job satisfaction is proclaimed.
AdministratorOctober 12, 2021 at 9:53 PM
Mohit this was agree or disagree essay, you did not provide a thesis statement in your introduction, which is required in these kinds of essays.
This was an exceptional writing. I’m pretty impressed with your sentence construction and use of vocabulary. You try to include a lot of uncommon words which is an upgrade in your writing. The best thing is that I did not find any grammatical errors. Commendable work.
Band score weightage: 5.5/6.0…. Half of the band is deducted only for structural anomaly in introduction.
MemberOctober 12, 2021 at 9:51 PM
In today’s materialist world, everyone is crazy about making money. People think the more money they make, the more comfortable life they would live because they believe in the fact that money can buy happiness, however, I completely disagree to this.
I strongly believe that if people are not satisfied with their job, it would affect their mental peace. I had a similar situation when I was in my first job. I didn’t get the job role that I desired for, but my company was paying me a handsome salary. I joined the company but after 1-2 months it started feeling like a trap as if I was in a rat race. It ruined my mental health. Then, I understood that money cannot buy you peace and I quit the job.
Also, people running after big salary packages end up facing major health issues. With bigger salary packages, come bigger responsibilities and with that scenario nowadays the working professionals get blood pressure related problems in their mid-30’s. They don’t realize what are they paying for the salary they are getting. People forget about their passions and aspirations; all they care about is money.
To conclude, I agree that money can solve a lot of problems in life, but it cannot buy you satisfaction. If someone is satisfied with their job, it is the biggest earning. If people are unwilling doing a job, just for the sake of big salary, they can end up facing various health issues at a very tender age.
AdministratorOctober 12, 2021 at 9:57 PM
However I completely disagree with this..
No grammatical errors to mention here, however the sentence complexity is not enough. There were a lot of opportunities to join multiple sentences together that you missed. For example:
To begin with I strongly believe in the notion that if people are not satisfied with the job it would affect their mental peace that I can cooperate with the situation that happened to me in my first job where I did not get the role I desired but the company offered me a handsome salary for a different role which ultimately I took……(no break required)
“Use more lexical resources”
Use more cohesive devices to start the paragraph.
Band score weightage: 4.0/6.0
MemberOctober 13, 2021 at 7:34 PM
Getting fat pay cheques are often considered paramount in a work environment rather than opting for a job profile which fosters inner fulfilment. This essay strongly disagrees with the notion that getting rich at the expense of personal contentment is at all beneficial in the long run.
First of all, earning hefty amounts as compensation brings greater responsibility towards job and tremendous stress which may leads to catastrophic consequences. One cannot always withstand constant mental fatigue and physical exertion such high paying jobs demand day in and day out. It can push people to the brink where they are more likely to collapse. As per recent instances, many top earning executives committed suicides in the last two years as they were not able to cope up with the day to day rigour of their highly paying job demanded and ever increasing stress.
Secondly, on the contrary if someone is discharging duties which one is quite passionate about performs to his full potential. If you are performing tasks which you love and cherish, makes you not only fulfil you goals but put you in a precious league of over achievers which in turn bring greater rewards in the long run. For example, Satya Nadella and Sundar Pichai excelled in their field as they were quite exuberant and enthusiastic in their jobs.
To conclude, the most successful, happy and healthy people are those who perform their jobs cheerfully with unwavering zeal without being unnecessarily buried under unrealistic expectations and unlocking their full potential to deliver unprecedented results.
MemberOctober 25, 2021 at 10:53 PM
It is often argued that it is more advantageous to choose a job with a high wage, even if it doesn’t appeal to you at all. I completely disagree with this opinion and think that job satisfaction is much more important than salary.
To begin with, I believe that job satisfaction gives people a sense of fulfillment that no money can guarantee. Even if someone is earning a high salary, but feels tense and compromises with his work, this person won’t enjoy his life. While pursuing one’s interests will always bring pleasure and a feeling of satisfaction. For example, a lot of famous researchers made their career choices, not because of appealing wages, but because they were passionate about science. That’s why it’s more important to choose the kind of work that makes you happy than to look only at a high salary.
More importantly, doing what you like keeps you motivated and therefore leads to career growth. In other words, there is a strong relationship between job satisfaction and productivity. People who love their jobs can easily excel in their fields of work and achieve better results than those, who put salaries in the first place. For instance, a lot of people decide to leave their everyday jobs despite a good wage and start their own small business for self-satisfaction over well-paid jobs. Thus, the advantages of jobs that keep you satisfied outweigh the drawback of a low salary from a long-term perspective.
To conclude, I strongly believe that job satisfaction is more beneficial than a high salary because it makes people happy and motivated.
MemberOctober 25, 2021 at 11:01 PM
No matter in what figure one is earning, but job satisfaction always overweighs the high package. Although, for some people, in greed of earning a lot of money to fulfill their dreams, highly payable jobs are more important than the area of interest. I totally disagree with this statement and this essay will further discuss why job satisfaction is prior to high pay?
The confusion whether one should go with the huge CTC or with the domain of interest often arises with the freshers, however the higher amount payable to the employees often attracts them. According to a study, if one is working in a field of interest, then the person most probably is living a more peacefully and satisfactory lifestyle than the one who’s earning a lot but working in a job which doesn’t interests. Moreover, it has also been noticed that sometimes passion and hobby also become a good career in one’s life.
Therefore, it is recommendable that rather than choosing the career by looking at the figures in salary, we better give priority to our interest. For instance, during my final year at college, one student was offered with 10 Lakh/annum CTC, but the technology was different from what she was seeking to work in. Consequently, instead of accepting the offer because of the bigger amount, she denied it since the interest mattered a lot for her than the salary.
To conclude, undoubtedly, when one is provided with more than the expected pay then it is obvious to get confuse while selecting one, however, we should always opt the job of our interest rather than choosing the one with huge amount because we can only progress and perform better if we are doing with full interest.
MemberOctober 25, 2021 at 11:07 PM
In today world money is more important than satisfaction for being happy in our life everyone think with money they get everything, I completely disagree with this statement.
I strongly believe that to get success in your life you need to satisfy whatever work your are doing, if you are not happy with your work so you lose your interest then you are facing lots of health issue. For many instances I seen people who are not interested in their work are facing many mental issues like depression on other hand the person who follow their passion will achieve good growth and are more happier.
Also with lots of money lots of responsibility will come and you get more busy in your work so you dont get time to spend that money.so therefore its very difficult to balance your work life.There are many examples where people join job for money only but after sometime they realise they are not getting that work life balance ,for them to manage their life in that condition is difficult.
In conclusion I want to say that satisfaction lead to happy and great life while money only give your short time happiness further it create lots of problem to balance life.
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