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  • IELTS Essay Writing (Learning a Foreign Language)

    Posted by Admin on August 9, 2021 at 8:39 PM

    Q. Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary school.

    Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

    Summary: Introduction

    Sentence 1- Paraphrase question

    Sentence 2- Thesis statement (state which one outweighs the other)

    Sentence 3- Outline sentence

    Main Body Paragraph 1 (Stronger Side)

    Sentence 4- Topic Sentence

    Sentence 5- Explain why it is strong

    Sentence 6- Example

    Sentence 7- Topic Sentence

    Sentence 8- Explain why it is strong

    Sentence 9- Example

    Main Body Paragraph 2 (Weaker Side)

    Sentence 10- Topic Sentence

    Sentence 11- Explain why it is not strong

    Sentence 12- Example


    Sentence 13- Summary of main points and restate position.


    Undoubtedly, recent years have seen a conspicuous trend of possessing different verbalization among young-lings. The argument as to whether or not this kind of advancement that is being implemented in elementary schools could bring boons or pitfalls has been metamorphosed into a moot point. Notwithstanding, this discourse delves into both standpoints, and subsequently will explore how the pros offset the cons, in turn.

    Apparently, the exponents that contend that edification of non-native wording has significant value in the overall development of juveniles – have their justification. The rationale behind their reasoning is most likely due to the fact that when the minors indulge in a multi-speaking academy from the beginning years of their lives, they can completely absorb the subject by practising with their mentors as well as peers in the form of exams, competitions, presentations, and debates. Consequently, the outcome of learned vocabulary may help them to be fluent in that specific subject. To epitomize, according to one survey by the Guardian Newspaper in the USA, in 2009, 30% of the fundamental school’s juniors had achieved a score above 90%, not only in understanding the different terminology but also in giving speech compared to the middle school’s pupils . Moreover, their self-esteem can ameliorate to the highest level once they have adroitness on foreign speech. Thus, vindication for the merits here.

    Conversely, could the contenders that posit that erudition of other courses over the main courses can only render drawbacks, be absolutely right? Certainly, it follows that while being involved in a study toddler does not only go through a learning pathway, but also needs to face some emotional, physical, and financial ups and downs; hence, it is really tough to stand against an overload of a grammar school in a little age. In one research by the Times of India, in 2015, as exemplification, 15% of the young population felt the detrimental consequences of failing miserably in communicating in another language after a year’s training. Put differently, teenagers always get an opportunity to bear those extra classes later in life when they are mature enough to absorb the purposes of learning various phraseology. Therefore, justifications of facing downtrends of studying foreign wording.

    To conclude, having explored both viewpoints, it is obvious that gaining knowledge of a foreign tongue has always benefits in many ways that can render the golden opportunity to convey in as much as possible languages. So, I, personally consent to the hilt that the rewards supersede the limitations; however, the excessive burden should not be trumped over benefits.

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  • Ashi

    August 10, 2021 at 7:40 PM

    Nowadays foreign language became (has become) significant for individuals growth. It is a key factor for the upliftment of an individual’s growth. This essay will examine the pros and cons of learning a foreign language in primary or secondary schools.

    The two main advantages of learning non-native language in primary schools are grass root level growth of child growth and also strong foundation built from the very beginning . Firstly, when the child pursue (pursues) any non-native language from primary school onwards it would enhance the capability to adopt more concepts as children of smaller age are able to persist more things which they learn at initial level. Secondly , it is comparatively easy for smaller kids to build strong foundation on any non-native language which is provided in primary school .

    On the contrary secondary schools provides (provide) advance level learning of non-native languages. But on the other side it has some major disadvantages like unable to provide the basic foundation level and also lack of focus and concentration on foreign language. For instance, when the child learn (learns) from secondary school there are high level of chances that the basic in depth knowledge is not provided. Also on the focus perspective it is tedious for students to tackle because of their main syllabi pressure .

    To conclude, secondary schools can facilitate high level knowledge in foreign language understanding but it has some disadvantages like grass root level understanding not provided and also from the focus perspective of child in secondary schools it is not efficient enough. I believe that learning foreign language in primary school is extremely fruitful as it outweigh the same in secondary schools.

    • Admin

      August 16, 2021 at 3:29 PM

      Feedback: Multiple Grammatical errors with multiple repetition highlighted in bold, need to work on Grammatical range & cohesive devices as limited sentence types were used.

      Band: 2:6


    August 10, 2021 at 11:26 PM

    Some experts say that schools should initiate teaching a foreign language to the children right from the primary grade as it is more beneficial for them, compared to starting at secondary grade. This essay will focus on the advantages and disadvantages of learning a foreign language at primary school.

    Major advantages of learning a new language in primary school is that it provides sufficient time for children to expertise in that language and helps them to choose a career option for them. Moreover, it is easier for a younger kid to learn something new in comparison to an older child. Firstly, initiating the process of teaching a foreign language to students from their primary grade provides them ample time to get the required training in that language and master it, and can help them (to) decide whether they want to a profession related to a linguistic field. For instance, nowadays most of the schools have an additional language as a compulsory subject for a primary school student, in which students can choose the language they want to learn. Secondly, as brains of younger children is (are) still in development stage, it is comparatively easier for them, to grasp the foreign language, than a secondary grade student.

    However, teaching foreign language to younger children also have (has) some drawbacks such as, it can overburden kids with loads of new things to memorise, also, it can effect the child’s understanding of other major subjects which he/she may pursue in future. Subjects of a prrimary (primary) school student may not seem complex to us but it is handful for them, and adding a new language to that may cause a chaos in their heads. Moreover, primary grade is the stage where the basic knowledge of any subject is taught to the students which is essential to understand that subject in the later stages, but learning a new language may disrupt this foundation. For instance, if a child does not have a clear idea about the basic calculation methods in mathematics, taught in the primary school, there is no way he/she can understand the complex formulae in future.

    To conclude, although learning a new language in initial stages of schooling have some drawbacks but the advantages surely outweigh the disadvantages of the same.

    • Admin

      August 16, 2021 at 3:38 PM

      Feedback: Approach is good, but need to work on sentence formation, spelling errors, preposition, punctuation, reverent content, language and more cohesive devices to link as highlighted in bold.

      Band: 2.5/6

  • Akhil

    August 11, 2021 at 9:23 AM

    With all the research on schools, few experts suggests that children should start learning foreign language in primary school than in the secondary one’s. This essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages in the view of professionals.

    The main advantages to learn foreign language in private schools are providing a well trained faculties and giving the best resources for easy understanding. Skilled language trainers will educate the students from basic to master’s level. For example, they will teach children how to get familiar with the language so that they can speak fluently. In primary schools there will be many resources provided with books to read and labs for interaction purposes. For example they conduct seminars where every child has to talk and also conducts weekly tests in listening and speaking the language.

    As we have seen the advantages in above paragraph, there are few drawbacks also. the major disadvantages are fees structures and stress in small ages. In corporate schools, they concentrate on studies as well as in extra circular activities so that they charge higher fees. In this case not every family can afford that much money for their children admissions. As every administrative department expects a great recognition through their students ranks, they give lot of assignments to do which automatically leads to stress in children mind. If the student cannot complete the work in time, he needs to manage time from his other schedules where the child gets less time to sleep. When there is no proper sleep there will be a lot stress in people mind.

    Taking everything into consideration, I am convinced that Foreign language is very important and the only platform to get best knowledge is in primary school. Though they are expensive the corporate schools should think about middle class families also. With that the downside of their academies.

    • Falak

      August 14, 2021 at 8:59 AM

      Feedback : The essay is off the track , question is not asking which schools provide better facilities rather right time to learn a foreign language.

      work on structure of essay, state your stand in the introduction as question demands “do advantages outweigh disadvantages”

      Grammar accuracy , use of synonyms , sentence structures need to be practiced.

  • Diya

    August 11, 2021 at 10:30 AM

    Learning a foreign language is a new trend followed nowadays. It is believed that learning a foreign language at primary school is better rather than at secondary school. In this essay we will examine both the benefits and drawbacks of this issue.

    Firstly, this is a fact that children who are approximately between five to ten years have the capacity to remember things twice as fast. For example: when my brother was in the third grade, he used to memorise new words quickly. However, now he cannot even learn many new phrases. Secondly, studying a foreign language is very helpful because students get to understand the lifestyle and different culture of the country. English is an international language on which over many people are communicating hence, being able to learn a second language will give a competitive advantages for children.

    Learning a Foreign language at primary school could have some possible disadvantages. Firstly, children may get confused because of learning so many languages at the same time and this could have some bad impact on their development. For example: It is claimed that Bilingual children develop the ability to talk more slowly than Monolingual Children. Secondly, it could be a waste of time since children also needs (need) to focus on other subjects like Evs, Mathematics and their own Mother tongue which they might need than a foreign one .

    In Conclusion, the benefits of learning a foreign language in primary school apparently outweigh the drawbacks. I believe learning English at a early age is more Favorable in terms of Adaptable and flexible nature of children.

    • Admin

      August 16, 2021 at 3:47 PM

      Feedback: Introduction is acceptable but few unnecessary grammatical errors and repetition found highlighted in bold, need to work on grammatical range, related words and few more complex sentences.

      Band: 2.5/6

  • Priyadarshini

    August 11, 2021 at 2:31 PM

    It is thought by some experts that children who start learning a foreign language in their primary schools make it better than secondary level. In this essay we will discuss about learning a foreign language at an early stage can bring about more advantages than disadvantages for children and will state a conclusion about it.

    Starting with the advantages, firstly, children at an early age are generally curious and can easily learn a vast amount of information. More specifically, a children’s brain is still in the phase of formation, which makes the absorption of the new information easier. Secondly, when kids learn a language at very early age they will have a good command over the language and fluency, which will boost their confident in both speaking and writing and also will help in building their curriculum. For instance, most of the job interviews, nowadays, are conducted in English. Therefore better fluency of the language may help them to overcome the barriers in job interviews.

    Learning foreign language can also have some issues involved like lack in reading and writing their native language as importance is given to the foreign language. For instance, some of the schools where foreign languages are considered to be the primary language rarely concentrate on the mother tongue which makes the children to not know their native language perfectly. However, this is not the case for every student and is rare. Secondly, pupils studying only three or four years in the school even at that moment do not properly concentrate on the lessons. It could be difficult to compel children to learn something else besides their curriculum subjects.

    In conclusion, the critical benefits that children gain by learning a foreign language will stand them in good stead when they become adults and in the long run, this will also benefit their careers and cognitive skills which will clearly outweigh any disadvantages.

    • Admin

      August 16, 2021 at 4:30 PM

      Feedback: Content is good with good use of related words, need to work on sentence formation as highlighted in bold, linking words a bit to create an impact and to make long sentences.

      Band: 3.5/6

  • Prabhjeet

    August 11, 2021 at 3:04 PM

    Some experts share a belief that children should start learning a foreign language early in their primary school rather than delaying it for secondary education. Beginning to master a non-native language early surely offers many benefits but with some drawbacks on the counterpart also. This essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of learning a foreign language in primary grade.

    To begin with the advantages, a youngster who is taught foreign wordings in the primary years outpaces those who start late and speaks likes a native by the time higher education is finished. If children initiate learning early, they would master the basics of grammar by the time they step into higher schooling. Meanwhile secondary students are still fretting to get a hold on the basics; a primary grader who started learning before time would bother about the advanced level during those years. Moreover, the foreign language becomes deeply-rooted and natural sooner.

    On the flipside, putting a pressure on young ones or limiting there play time would hinder childhood development. A child’s mind is already preoccupied with frivolous matters but they learn by exploring different things. On top of that, the addition of another task might seem like a burden to them, hindering their creativity and playtime. More importantly, the time devoted for studying academic subjects also suffers a loss making it difficult for them to understand academia in depth. Although the mind of a youngster is sharp, trying to teach them is still a difficult task for both parents and instructors.

    In conclusion, the downsides of staying ahead of time and learning a foreign language early does pose some problems but they can be managed by proper planning of time. On the whole, I am convinced that if this task aligns with the interest of a child, then the pros outweigh the cons of the same.

    • Admin

      August 16, 2021 at 4:44 PM

      Feedback: Good approach with relevant content, just try to work on sentence formation as highlighted in introduction, in BP 1 and BP 2 work on examples as well.

      Band: 3.5/6

  • Sanjay

    August 11, 2021 at 6:49 PM

    For past few decades the syllabus of young-lings have been becoming more and more elaborate because of addition of subjects like foreign languages. Some experts argue that studying foreign languages in early stages of schooling is of immense importance and some other refute such an argument. The later thinks that non-native languages should be left for secondary school. This essay will weigh both the arguments and will analyse the pros and cons of this extra burden on kids and will reach a rational conclusion.

    For a kid language is a window that opens into the ocean of information and having reasonable knowledge, particularly in languages like English cannot be emphasised more . Since English is a universal language and a (an) innumerable number of books are written in English the inability to read and understand the language well impede child’s ability to attain more knowledge. To exemplify the state syllabus students of my native place Kerala generally have poor skills in English language because of the absence of proper training in primary schools. So during early period of schooling this kids are unable to read and comprehend books written in English .Thus teaching a foreign language in primary school open (opens) many doors of knowledge and possibilities in front of children

    However everything comes at a coast (cost)! The increased burden of studying can put stress on young pupils and this can affect their mental health if go unchecked. It’s astounding that there are some syllabuses which includes (include) foreign languages like French and Spanish . What is the purpose of learning these languages since we can communicate in every corner of the world with just knowing English..? There may be some areas where people don’t understand English .But knowing all these languages are humanely impossible and its irrational to pressurise kids to learn these languages of little practical importance. The undue stress can lead to long lasting effects on mental health of children.

    So to conclude learning useful things like English language should be
    promoted, and it should be learned in primary school itself for better
    understanding, and easy upgrading of academic skills in future ;as well as
    adding unnecessary subjects to syllabus should be avoided too

    • Admin

      August 16, 2021 at 4:53 PM

      Feedback: Good use of vocabulary along with relevant content, need to work on sentence formation means subject/verb/agreement as highlighted in bold along with few grammatical errors.

      Band: 3.5/6

  • priya

    August 12, 2021 at 7:00 PM

    Few professionals have stated that teaching a new language to children at the early age is better than during the latter part of their studies. This essay will inspect the advantages and disadvantages of learning a foreign language at junior school than at the senior level with a suitable conclusion at the end.

    Firstly, children can pick up a novel language at a faster pace as their brains are still under developmental stage. Apart from that, kids in the age group of 4 to 10 have very less curriculum to learn when compared with the senior students who have to work on their projects and board exams. For instance, many schools prefer to teach non-native languages at primary level in order to relieve this additional burden from students of secondary level. In addition, children will not have any fear or hesitation of making mistakes while learning a new language which makes it easier for them to learn.

    On the other hand, children in the elementary school are very playful and mischievous. Forcing them to learn an additional language apart from regular subjects is a tedious job. In such a case, pupils will not concentrate on anything and will end up in acquiring nothing valuable from their studies. In addition, teaching the basics of other subjects like Physics and mathematics is (are) more crucial because not learning the fundamentals of these subjects will jeopardize their future. Hence teaching an additional language should be prioritized only after the technical subjects.

    In conclusion, though there are minor disadvantages in learning an extra language, being bilingual or multilingual has its own share of advantages and these pros will open many new windows of opportunities if learnt in the early part of our life.

    • Admin

      August 16, 2021 at 4:59 PM

      Feedback: Content is acceptable but need to work on grammatical range a lot as found Future Tense was used in the essay as found many, and also need to work on essay structure to categorised the paragraphs accordingly.

      Band: 2/6

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