[Unknown Member]

Dear Sir,

I am writing to express interest in the part time job vacancy at your restaurant as it will be an opportunity for me to work for your hotel considering my skills and experience. And this letter would brief you about my qualification and desire to work for your hotel.

I would like to apply for this job as I am pursing my masters in Hotel Management and this job will help me in grooming my skills and practical knowledge.

I also did my internship in one of the famous hotels in India which is Taj Hotel in Mumbai where I am taking care of the same profile which is mentioned by you in the job description for this vacancy. As it would be very tough for me while pursing my master to work as a full-time so I am really grateful to work with your hotel in part time position.

Further I am available for full day on weekends only because this is the only time when I am not preoccupied with my classes and can be easily available. I am also attaching my update CV with this letter for your reference.

If you require any further information, feel free to contact me.

Your Faithfully

XYX

[Admin]

Good work on information & execution of three bullet points.
Feedback: Need to work on grammatical range and cohesive devise bit more.
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[Unknown Member]

Dear sir,

After having seen your advertisement in the local newspaper dated 21st of April, regarding the part-time job being offered by your restaurant i.e. Food Festival.

I would like to apply for the part-time job as I am already into the hospitality diploma of two years through HMV college. I have enough time after my classes which I want to utilize for earning to expense my studies.

I already had experience of one and half year in the restaurant like yours after I completed my high school. The copy of which has been attached for your reference. I can be helpful in taking order and managing the orders promptly. My leadership quality will surely be useful for managing the crowd and customer complaints as I have learned in the training provided from my institute I am studying with.

I can work from 4pm till 9pm as these are the peak hours of your work place in the weekdays and full day in the weekends. This would also add to my experiences.

To expense my studies this job would be of great help.

I look forward to receiving your response.

Yours faithfully,

Jasmeet Kaur

[Admin]

Feedback: Well attempt to approach every point required but execution got failed as Introduction needs to be improved along with rest of the cohesive devices & also work on sentence formation as per letter requirement.
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[Unknown Member]

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express interest in your recent part-time job offer for the position computer operator, I believe it will be a really great opportunity for me to start my career with such a reputed restaurant with 100% client satisfaction.

In addition, I have six months of experience with the same scope of work , moreover, my major job key areas are manage accounts, orders, bills, discount & promotional activity and along with I was providing customer support over the phone and email. Even, I was awarded with best performance and 100% attendance.

Recently, I have left my previous job due to continue my further study and improving the skills therefore, I stay occupied till noon and after I have spare time till night. Hence, I would be grateful if you would give me this opportunity to work in your restaurant for the above post in the evening shift for the regular days.

I look forward to receiving your response.

Yours faithfully

Zack

[Admin]

Feedback: Good use of linking words, well approached all bullet points, However, few sentence formation are found unstructured. Therefore, need to work on related words and execution of formation.

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[Unknown Member]

Thanks for giving your valuable feedback, further, I would request you to please highlight those areas/lines where need to correct the sentence formation. It will be very helpful.

[Unknown Member]

Dear Sir/Madam,

After having seen of your advertisement regarding part time job vacancy in local newspaper on 2nd June 2021.

I would like to apply for this opportunity as I have prior experience of hotel industry and would like to grow the business by using my experience as well as it’s a

good opportunity for me to enhance my skills. Currently, I am pursuing masters in hotel management from a renowned college and I have completed my last semester training from a well known 5-star hotel.

I have started my career with Oberoi group as executive chef where I got an opportunity to work with highly skilled chefs of Indo-Chinese cuisine and it helped me to learn authentic way of cooking. Later on I have been promoted as senior chef and got transferred to Hongkong to enhance Chinese cooking skills. While working with the Chinese staff I have learned lots of new recepies and along with this I have been more disciplined. I did my internship specifically in management where I got chance to lead a kitchen staff and worked on my leadership qualities.

I would be available in evening hours for week days as I have my classes in morning and on weekends I can be more flexible to working hours from midday to midnight as per your requirement.

I have attached my updated resume, please feel free to contact me in case any detail is required.

I look forward to your response.

Yours faithfully

XXX

[Admin]

Feedback: Need to work on complex & cohesive devise bit more. Rest approach is good.
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[Unknown Member]

[Unknown Member]

Dear Sir,

I am writing with regard to assist my services at your food chain. I have recently seen an advertisement on the newspaper, where it is stated that your restaurant is looking for someone to do the part time job.

Firstly , I would like to express my concerns towards applying for the job. Not only this job is important for my professional experience but also I need this job badly for the survival of my family, where I have to solely manage all the household expenses. For this reason, I would like to apply for the job .

Furthermore, one thing that I believe, I would be the suitable candidate for the job ,owing to the fact I had experience of almost 5 years serving at especially renowned 5 star rating restaurants where I was given best performance award by the manager as well as by the visitors. Apart from that , I do my tasks with full dedication that I think will do wonders for the restaurant.

Lastly, I would like you to consider my request regarding my preferred working slot. As during weekdays , I am completely free after evening where I would be delighted to serve dinner to the people. However , at the weekends I am ready to work according to your desirable timeslot.

Looking forward for your response.

Yours faithfully, 06.05.2021

Emma Watson

[Admin]

Feedback: Well attempt to approach every point required but execution got failed as Introduction needs to be improved along with rest of the cohesive devices & also work on sentence formation as per letter requirement, few grammatical errors were also found. Need rigorous practice on the format.
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[Unknown Member]

Dear Sir,

I am writing to you express my interest in the Job advertisement publish in local newspaper column for part-time vacancy in your esteem restaurant for Reception manager. As per the requirements I find myself a suitable candidate for this job.

I would like to mention that I have been working as part-time receptionist in Al-Haya restaurant situated at Humayun Nagar, from last six months. My duties includes taking orders, accepting bills and handling cash. But recently I had to move to Hitech city and I had to left that Job.

Currently, I have enrolled in Master’s Degree in Finance and will not be able to do full time job, as I have to cope up with my regular classes, thus find this job as suitable as it requires only few hours of work. Furthermore, I am having off on Saturday’s and would be easily available if you want me to work on weekends. I assure you of my hard work, punctuality and loyalty.

I am also attaching my updated CV and certificates along with this letter. Hope my experience will fulfill your requirement for this post.

Thanking you in anticipation, if you require any further information please contact me on below number.

Yours faithfully

Naheda Ilyas

[Admin]

Feedback: Very well executed, justify all three bullet points with relevant information. Need to avoid grammatical errors: “I am writing to you express”, “My duties includes”, “from last six months”
& Unnecessary spelling errors (fulfill).
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[Unknown Member]

Dear sir,

I am writing this letter to express my interest in taking this part time job at your restaurant.

I have recently worked in Radison Hotel for the past 5 years. I have excellent communication skills along with the ability to work with a wide range of people.

I am volunteering to work 6 days a week. I will be willing to have my shifts in the morning hours till noon.

I would be grateful if you give me chance to work at your restaurant. Therefore, I look forward to receiving your response.

Yours Faithfully,

Shazia Tahmeen

[Admin]

Feedback: Good effort to justify all three bullet points. Need to avoid grammatical errors: “I have recently worked in Radison Hotel for the
past 5 years”,
& Cover at least 150 words.
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[Unknown Member]

Dear Sir/ Madam,

I am writing this letter to express my interest for the recently posted part-time job (i.e., from 6pm till 10pm) at your restaurant.

At present I am working at Dhakeshwari Restaurant, which is located in Kolkata on part-time basis, i.e., from 8am till 2pm and is having an experience of 4 years in the same field.

Here, at Dhakeshwari Restaurant I am working on the same job role which is equivalent to the requirements posted in the job description.

I have attached my resume, herewith this mail.

Thus, It would be great if you provide me an opportunity to work at your organisation and looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours Faithfully,

Mayukh Ghosh

[Admin]

Feedback: Really need to work on the format of task 1 & structure.

[Unknown Member]

Dear Sir,

I am writing to inform you about my interest as a part time chef in your restaurant.

Firstly, I want to go with my educational qualifications. I was completed my Hotel Management degree in 2020. Currently I’m working as a junior chef in Novotel and actively looking for a part time job on my weekends. Fortunately i came across with the part time job notification in your restaurant. I am glad to apply for this.

Furthermore, To look into my professional experience as a chef I had started my career as an intern in Taj Banjara hotel, There I had worked for one year. Then after I moved to Novotel hotel as an assistant chef. I have been working here from last 2 years.

Finally, I am looking for a part time chef job only on my weekends since I has my regular job on weekdays. During weekends I will be available from 10Am to 6Pm as a chef.

Looking forward for your prompt response.

Yours faithfully

Venkatesh chinthala

[Admin]

Feedback: Good effort to justify all three bullet points. Need to avoid grammatical errors: “I was completed”, “from last 2 years.”
& Cover at least 150 words & work on the requirement of task 1.

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