[Upneet saini]

Many people opine that social media websites like facebook, whatsapp have a detrimental effect on people and community.

[Anureet]

opine- incorrect word choice

start with According to many people

facebook, whtasapp- Facebook and Whatsapp

individual- people- collocation mistake- write individual only

[jaidheesh]

A lot of people think that websites that encourage social networking like Facebook have a profound negative effect on both the person and the public.

[Anureet]

websites that encourage social networking- social networking websites

person and public- collocation mistake- it will be written as individual and society only because the public is not the same as society.

[Shweta]

A large majority of people believe that there is a huge downside of social networking sites such as facebook, on both people as well as society.

[Anureet]

A large majority- A majority

Rest is correct. Keep Writing!

[saravana]

Numerous humans have the thought in their mind that online community services such as Facebook, twitter, instagram, whattsapp have a massive demerits effect on every single person and the whole community as well.

[Anureet]

humans- collocation mistake- people

online community services- social networking sites or social media platforms

have a massive demerits- have a detrimental effect

on every single person- on the individual

whattsapp- WhatsApp

[Monika]

Many people think that both individuals as well as society are negatively impacted by the enhanced use of social networking platforms(such as Facebook, WhatsApp).

[Anureet]

please post one response as it will be easier for me to evaluate

[Monika]

Please consider the last one for evaluation.

[Monika]

Many people think that enhanced usage of social networking platforms (such as Facebook) adversely impacts both individuals as well as society.

[Monika]

Many people think that social networking platforms (such as Facebook) adversely impacts both individuals as well as society.

[Monika]

Many people think that both individuals as well as society are getting adversely impacted by the use of social networking platforms like Facebook, WhatsApp, etc.

[Anureet]

society are- society is

Facebook, Whatsapp- Facebook and Whatsapp, etc.

[Jyotiraditya Reddy]

Most of the people feel that, There is an adverse effect on individuals and society by the social media such as Facebook.

[Anureet]

Rewrite it as it is grammatically inaccurate.

[Jyotiraditya Reddy]

Most people feel that there is an adverse effect on individuals and society by social media such as Facebook.

[Anureet]

by social media- rephrase- because of excessive usage of social media

[rakhee]

Many people have an opinion that social networking sites(face book )will have an adverse effect on individual as well as society

[Anureet]

facebook- Facebook- Proper Noun

[Abhishek]

Many people believe that the impact of social networking sites (such as Facebook) on individuals as well as on society is detrimental.

[Anureet]

paraphrased correctly

[Sumit]

Bountiful individuals consider social networking platforms (like Facebook) to have a massive adverse influence on the two: Individuals and Society.

[Anureet]

Bountiful individuals- Many people

paraphrase clearly without complicating it

[PRIYA]

According to many people’s point of view the social networking sites like Facebook and Instagram are leaving adverse effects not only on individuals but also on the society.

[Anureet]

the social-social