[Unknown Member]

The way information is disseminated and consumed has been revolutionized by the internet, but many problems are created because of that which were not sited earlier. This essay will discusses both problems associated with this and probable solutions.

One of the first and foremost problem of internet is hacking of critical information like government security information and international airport passengers information. For example, in 2009, full control board of international airport of England was hacked, as result airport was closed for almost 5 hours and many passengers were suffered. Another major problem is breach of privacy of people through different social media. For instance, many news are published regarding the personal details are leaked through social media platform and that leads to mental disorders to many people. Therefore, careful actions should be taken to control these problems.

In my opinion, the best solution of these solutions are, firstly government should make stringent cyber security regulations and it should be implemented and monitored very carefully. For instance, after implementing such law in United Arab Emirates in 2014, they found that there is greater improvement in security system. Secondly, every individual should be very careful while posting any information especially on social media at the same time they should make a habit of checking privacy setting which definitely help not to disclose any sensitive informations.

In conclusion, however there are many problems associated with internet thesedays, these can be overcome by implementing strict cyber security policy by government and by checking privacy setting before posting any information to social media by individual.

[Falak]

but many problems are created because of that which were not sited earlier (but many problems are created which were not sited (cited) earlier)

One of the first and foremost problem (The first and foremost problem)

platform and that leads to mental disorders (distress) to many people

the best solution of these solutions (problems) are,

before posting any information to (on) social media

Take care of minor details as mentioned . However, usage of wide range of sentence structures would be appreciated Keep writing!!

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[Unknown Member]

Due to modernization and technological development in the world, the availability of the internet has made it extremely easy the way data is being exchanged and utilized. Whereas, along with the benefits it came up with significant risks. The below paragraphs provide evidence of the problems and solutions associated with information sharing over the internet.

First of all, due to the vast amount of data that are available in the internet, it is increasing the hacking numbers per day and cyber threats. For example, a few months ago there was a major cyber-attack on the government website that exposed all the military information of the country. Not only the government official websites but also many other commercial and technological companies are encountering this issue. Along with that, due to too much availability of information over internet causes the risk where a child can access potential harmful sites. One of the examples of such harmful sites would be porn websites where children can easily register and acknowledge their age. This would definitely affect their thoughts, development, future, and eventually to society.

There are some solutions to the problems discussed in the above paragraph by taking necessary precautionary measures. Government and organizations need to have a strong IT security system that could review the architecture and protect their internal data such as by using strong passwords, encrypting data. In addition, the government needs to pass necessary cyber security rules and regulations that would tighten these cyber-criminal attacks. Furthermore, it is important for parents to ensure that kids are not accessing porn sites and track their usage and the websites being used.

To conclude, as there are both pros and cons for every development that’s happening in the modern world, it is an individual’s responsibility to use it ethically. However, by following the right guidelines and appropriate actions it would be a powerful tool for everyone to use.

@falak – please review

[Falak]

Whereas, along with the benefits (,) it came up with significant risks.

Thesis statement could be more effective (could mention problem or solution)

data that are available in (on) the internet,

In body paragraph 1, topic sentence is missing

it is increasing the hacking numbers per day and cyber threats. ( It is increasing the rate of hacking numbers and cyber threats per day)

Along with that, due to too much availability of information over internet causes the risk where a child can (just give a check , the issue is not about availability of too much information but how readily it is available)

potential (potentially) harmful sites

acknowledge their age. (deny their age)

eventually to society. ( to is not required)

as there are both pros and cons for every development that’s happening in the modern world, (I suggest not to project essay as “advantages and disadvantages essay” ; rather it is a problem solution one)

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[Unknown Member]

Contemporary world is witnessing drastic changes in the ways of communication after the advent of internet. Owing to this, a lot of problems are being created and there should be appropriate methods to tackle such emerging issues. This essay will through light upon such problems and the possible solutions to each.

First of all problems, there is an absolute breach in the privacy of an individual in any platforms of the internet since the applications are using and selling individual data to third parties. Why? because, any media which is available in the internet asks a person’s personal details and location upon signing up in that application, which they share with a lot of other platforms. For example, an incident was reported in 2019, when facebook shared information of its more than 500 million subscribers to another party. Moving further to another issue which is, hacking and fraudulent activities over the internet which has emerged recently. That is, with the use of personal credentials, any application can loot an individual’s money or other valuables as these days even banking is possible online.

With regards to remedies, at the individual level, people can go through the privacy settings and terms and conditions while using any sites. Moreover, governments should take necessary actions and amend laws regarding cyber crimes along with strengthening of existing cyber police wing. Then, more laws and stringent punishments should be implemented to prevent poeple commiting crimes using the internet. To cite an instance, in Kerala, the southern state of India, in 2019, there was massive looting of money from different individuals which was tracked by the cyber cell and the criminal was penalised appropriately.

To conclude, as there are novel problems due to widespread use of internet, there should be more laws and also existing laws can be reinforced. People should be warned of fraudulent websites and should be asked to abstain from such sites on the internet.

[Falak]

Contemporary world is witnessing drastic changes in the ways of communication (and the way information is being shared ), after the advent of internet

This essay will through (throw)

privacy of an individual in (on) any platforms of the internet

using and selling individual(‘s) data

Why? because, any media which is available in the internet asks a person’s personal details and location upon signing up in that application, which they share with a lot of other platforms. ( a contradiction has been observed , either write how? instead of Why? or explain Why they do say in elaborated way

With regards to remedies, (regard)

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[Unknown Member]

[Falak]

has creating (is creating/has created)

a (not required) distinct problems

transforming (transferring) the data

Secondly(,)

into (on) internet

has been solved by the government (should be solved; as these are the suggestions)

work on sentence structure, avoid using same words repeatedly rather write synonyms. No example found

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[Unknown Member]

With the use of the internet, the way of sharing the information has changed and some problems that were not present in the past have been created by this development. This essay will discuss some problems related to the internet followed by some solutions to tackle them.

To begin with, one of the serious problems is online fraud and hacking. Many personal data and information related to a person are available on the internet that lead to serious fraud and crimes. For example, hackers steal some private data of people and blackmail them on the basis of that information. Another major problem is easy access to any information on any site, which is sometimes dangerous for children. They can access some adult content like pornography by just providing some false details related to their age, which might affect their minds and they get diverted from studies.

Some solutions are provided to overcome these problems. The government should pass a law to protect the personal data and secure the privacy along with some cyber security. Additionally, some strict IT securities should be there to verify the details of users using strong passwords. Some awareness programs should be run by the government and IT firms regarding the sharing of personal information on the internet. Parents should also keep an eye on the activity of their children and educate them about the right uses of the internet.

To conclude, the Internet has made the individual’s life easy along with some serious problems. However, some actions such as data privacy and cyber security taken by the government are provided a good solutions to these problems.

[Falak]

Feedback : well- written and nicely developed however, an example in body paragraph2, would be appreciated.

There is room for improvement in Lexical resources and sentence structure

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[JESHWANTH]

The new age invention “internet” has changed the way we use and exchange the information. consequently, it has led to new difficulties, troubling people in an unexpected manner. internet’s lack of censorship and data responsibility are major hurdles of internet experience. this essay will discuss the problems and provide a logical solution.

There are many difficulties caused by internet, however it is worth mentioning the generally observed problems. there are two crucial difficulties i.e., no censor and regulation of internet and data responsibility. some internet platforms restrict content and flag inappropriate posts. In fact, internet as a whole, is never censored, few countries like China and others do restrict people from accessing certain websites, but do not regulate the content available on internet. On the other hand, data responsibility is an unavoidable problem for authorities when battling fake news. whatever data created by people on internet like files, text, video and audio does not contain much information to track down the origin. it is copied multiple times by sharing. therefore, various platforms using different formats for their media usage alters data information and it becomes impossible to gather any details.

However, these problems can be solved if they are taken seriously by global organizations. though few countries restrict some content, it is possible to eliminate and regulate all the inappropriate data. global organizations should take responsibility of regulating all data available on the internet and censor data to provide access, according to the age of the user. In addition, data uploaded on the internet by users can be held responsible if digital signatures are made compulsory to post content online and if self-declaration is also introduced to share or forward content found on internet.

To conclude, internet is a great source of information of all kinds. although, it has brought along quite a few problems like lack of censorship and data responsibility with its advancement. they can be solved with collective measures like regulation by global organizations and implementation of digital signatures and self-declaration.

[JESHWANTH]

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[Sudhakar]

Although Internet has simplified the way humans live, it has also introduced dangerous problems which were not existed before. The major problems are breach of privacy and access to obscenic content to children, however by following strategies like checking the authenticity of websites before sharing the sensitive information and government enforcing the vigilant rules to ban or restrict vulnerable websites.

The major problem with the internet and the way we share the information globally is breach of privacy and it is one of the global concerns aswell. The leading technology companies worldwide are holding the crucial information about its users and it is being used to track their online activity, to identify their requirements to target the advertisements and influencing their political and regional believes. For instance, in 2017 US elections tech giant facebook has been alleged that it has influenced huge user base to vote for Donald trumph by persuading their political believes.Furthermore internet has paved the way for another crucial problem like provided the access to obscenic content to children.Now with limited control and no strict rules on adult websites, it has become easy for children to gain access to pornogrphaic and violent content, which impacts their physical and mental health.

However,by following certain policies these problems can be resolved.Firstly, to resolve the breach of privacy, one must be carefull all the time while sharing any sensitive information on internet and should check the authenticity of a website.Secondly, to avoid access to indecency content to children, parents should monitor their online activity by installing specific softwares and also should put a parental control.Governmet also should come forward to block the dangerous websites.

To conclude, internet has brought severe problems along with its great impact on human life. Breach of Privacy and easy access to obscenic content to children are major problems, however properly monitoring the authenticity of websites before sharing information and enforcement of vigilant rules to ban the websites with inappropriate content by government will resolve these issues.

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[Falak]

access to obscenic content to (by) children

however by following strategies like checking the authenticity of websites before sharing the sensitive information and government enforcing the vigilant rules to ban or restrict vulnerable websites. (these issues can be mitigated)

tech giant facebook (Facebook)

Furthermore (,) internet has paved the way

must be carefull (careful)

Try to manage the question in 40 minutes. Repetitive usage of vocabulary has been observed, make use of synonyms and rephrase the sentences.

[Krithiga]

Nowadays, Internet has a major role to play in everyone’s daily lives. Although, it has led to radical changes in the way people consume and share information, it has also paved way to serious problems which never existed earlier. This essay will outline the problems associated with internet and suggest ideas to overcome those issues.

One of the main problems caused by the internet is cyber crime. For example, online banking transactions or online services provide a high risk of stealing the confidential information such as credit card information and personal details leading to hefty financial losses and privacy. Furthermore, it aggravates the problems leading to bankruptcy if proper actions are not taken at appropriate time. Another annoying problem is easy accessibility to obscene or pornographic images where adolescents are getting affected with their personal lives. A recent example of a teenager in California who was a brilliant student in academics became mentally ill of watching obscene movies for past few days along with his friends. Students are getting addicted to such websites which distracts them from concentrating on their studies.

However, there are solutions to alleviate these problems. To address cybercrime, rigorous government regulations on a global scale are needed. Also, cooperation is required amongst law enforcement agencies around the world to track down and apprehend these criminals who operate across multiple borders. Dealing with pornographic websites has to be handled by intertwined collaboration between parents and schools, as people most addicted to these websites are teenagers. Teens should be educated to realize the implications of Internet addictions along with letting them know the impact of consequences of such websites on their career growth and they also should be encouraged to engage in outdoor activities.

In conclusion, the main problems caused by the Internet are related to crime and addiction. To solve these parents, teachers and governments should enforce certain rules and regulations in their respective areas to eradicate issues stemming out of Internet. By addressing these issues, people can harness the Internet’s unlimited potential and steer clear of its adverse impacts.

[Falak]

Students are getting addicted to such websites which distracts (distract)

well-written.

Keep writing!!!

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[Kapil]

In this modern era, technology has been growing rapidly for decades, and it plays a major role in the life of human beings. There are merits and demerits to using it, hence in this present world, it creates trouble for the person which did not exist earlier. This essay will first suggest the biggest problems caused by this phenomenon are the hacking of personal information and loose concentration from the study and then argue that awareness about the security and limited use of the internet is the most viable solution.

To begin with, the internet is the most important invention of humankind, but security breaches and easy accessibility are the most problems caused by it. Firstly, the information of a person is not secure anymore, because a group of people has looked for the stole amount from the bank, so they always try to get personal details as much as possible which they use to hack bank account. Secondly, the young generation can access the web easily through electronic gadgets because nowadays parents also prefer to keep updated with their children, but due to overuse of social networks and games, they become habitual to staying online late at night and could not concentrate on the study which directly effects on their career. For instance, in the last 5 years the depression cases increased on boom in the united states because adults spent an average of 7 hours on the world wide web and they are concerned about the likes of their pictures and post on social media so if it will not reach a certain level, they feel upset.

On the other hand, a possible solution to reduce this problem would be the awareness among the users and defining limitations to using the internet. Firstly, Government should take necessary steps to make secure bank platforms and spread the awareness about the usability of networks between individuals, which is helpful to reduce the cases of cybercrime because nowadays if users get hacked, they don’t complain anywhere, so authorities don’t have the details about the cases so it is also the responsibility of the person to make cybercrime case to stop such an incident. Secondly, Parents should keep watch on their child to use the internet, and schools & colleges should band the mobile phone during the classes because most the students are busy with their gadgets for chatting and playing games. For example, Sweden become one of the gadget-free countries in the world where they use an average of 1 hour’s internet per local because individuals and authorities had taken the steps together to stop the use of the web.

To conclude, the Internet is a giant in the world which makes it easy life for people at the same time it creates a lot of troubles such as personal details breaches and interruption in education, but possible solutions could be limited use and awareness about the security of the web.

[Manveen]

In this techno-advanced world, the advent of the internet is both a boon and a bane. On the one hand, it has led to the development of mankind, on the other, it has paved the way for the issues that man never thought of. Some grave troubles associated are online looting in adults and behavioral issues in teens. However, these can be mitigated with secure browsing and vigilant parents respectively.

To begin with, the major concerns of the people these days is the change in the thought processes of kids and being exploited by fraudulent online. Firstly, children go for unfiltered surfing which results in making them stubborn or sometimes arrogant. Secondly, talking about adults, they fell into rattrap of web-based frauds resulting in loss of money. There is ample evidence about adolescents watching vulgar on YouTube which persuaded many for rapes. Therefore, it is plausible that this new technology has many deficits associated with it.

Every problem has a solution; the disturbing problems created by the internet can be cured with a reliable security system and vigilance of guardians towards the young minds. To add, awareness of the terms and conditions of every deal online is a must to save a person’s hard-earned money. Furthermore, the youngsters ought to be taught about the difference between ethical and unethical glimpsing over the net. For an instance, numerous working parents have got the software installed in their children’s systems that disables the content that is age-inappropriate. Hence, it is incontrovertible that the given measures can be some good solutions.

To conclude, after agglomerating the aforementioned writing it is clear that the internet has been a great asset in the way it helps people. Conversely, there are some unignorable problems related to monetary loss by elders and sudden mood swings in youngers. Although, serious steps mentioned above, can resolve these problems