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  • Bhargav

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    May 18, 2022 at 1:39 PM
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    The Above bar chart illustrates the expenditure figures of consumer goods in France and the UK in the year 2010 and the amount is represented in pound sterling which is Europe’s official currency.

    Overall, in the UK and France people spent more money on cars and spent lesser money on perfumes. followed by the books, cameras and computers at a mid-range level

    France’s expenses trend in the year 2010 starting with cars at 400,000 pounds is the most spent product followed by computers at 375,000 pounds, books at 300,000 pounds, perfumes at they 200,000 pounds and camera stand as the least spent goods at 150,000 pounds

    whereas the UK consumption shift shows that they spent more money on cars than France at 450,000 pounds and spent 125,000 pounds for perfumes which are lower than France. moreover, The Uk invested 410,000 pounds for books, 350,000 pounds for computers, and 360,000 pounds for cameras in the year 2010.

  • Ashley

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    May 19, 2022 at 9:51 AM
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    The above chart illustrates the percentage of goods sold in UK and France in the following year 2010 and the amount mentioned in the chart is in United Kingdom’s official currency which is pound sterling.

    Overall the people of UK and France mostly spend their money on cars followed by books, computers and cameras which is in the mid-range. Although the least on which people rarely spend is on perfumes.

    The people in UK almost invested 450000 sterling pounds on car which is the most highest in the charts followed by books at 400000 pounds, cameras and computers which matches the same around 350000 pounds, perfumes which shows the lowest is around 150000 pounds.

    Whereas the France shows the highest on cars which is around 400000 pounds, followed by computers around 370000 pounds, books on 300000 pounds, perfumes around 200000 pounds and the least one which people rarely invest on camera which is around 150000 pounds in the following year 2010.

    • Falak

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      May 25, 2022 at 7:58 AM
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      Overall(,) the people of

      which is (are) in the mid-range

      Although the least on which people rarely spend is on perfumes. – least and rarely both are serving the same purpose

      perfumes which shows the lowest is around 150000 pounds. – perfumes shows what? the “expenditure” is missing in the entire explanation

      No grouping and comparison of data found.

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  • Koppolu Preethi

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    May 19, 2022 at 9:51 AM
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    The bar chart illustrates the expenditure of consumer goods in France and UK in the year 2010 . This information is measured in pounds.

    Overall, UK spent more money on consumer goods when compared to France. There is more expenditure spent on cars and lesser money on perfumes followed by mid-range level of expenditure on other things like books, cameras and computers over the given period.

    In details, UK spent 450.000 pounds and France spent only 400.00 pounds on cars. France expenditure on computers is almost near to their expenditure spent on Cars, but whereas UK slightly was able to control their money for computer. Further more than 400.000 pounds expenditure for UK was spent to books. On the other hand, France only used 300.000 pounds. France cost 150.000 pounds for camera and UK cost more, it was more than 350.000 pounds. On perfumes, UK cost less than France and the total expenditure spent on perfumes is very lesser when compared to others.

    • Falak

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      May 25, 2022 at 9:11 AM
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      There should be two feature paragraphs, 4 paragraphs in total

      the expenditure of (on) consumer goods

      Further(,) more than 400.000 pounds

      UK cost (spent) less than France

      make use of subordinating words to convey the comparison even better.

      Keep writing!!

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  • Arun

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    May 19, 2022 at 10:29 AM
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    The above bar graph shows data relating to the comparison of expenditure between France and UK on consumer goods in 2010. These categories are calculated in Pounds Sterling. Clearly, both the countries had a dramatic spending on all consumer goods in 2010 except much for perfumes.

    Although France was the leading player on consuming Computers and Perfumes by a marginal difference of 25000 Pounds Sterling and 10000 Pounds Sterling respectively than UK.

    In Contrast, UK had shown a significant spending than France on certain common goods like Cars, Books and Cameras by a substantial difference of 50000 Pounds Sterling, 100000 Pounds Sterling and 21000 Pounds Sterling respectively.

    In Conclusion, France had only a modest high in spending on Computers and Perfumes than UK while in terms of expenditure on Cars, Books and Cameras UK is leading France by a sharp difference which is also depicted in the bold 100% rise in Cameras in 2010.

    • Falak

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      May 25, 2022 at 8:39 AM
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      Although France was the leading player on consuming Computers and Perfumes by a marginal difference of 25000 Pounds Sterling and 1000 0 Pounds Sterling respectively than UK. – data is inaccurate

      There is no need to write conclusion in task 1 , rather the overview should be presented that too with “overall”

      France had only a modest high in spending (France had spent modestly high on..)

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  • Sonam

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    May 19, 2022 at 11:58 AM
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    The above bar graph depicts the relative spending done by two countries that is France & UK on consumer goods in 2010. The units will be measured in pounds sterling.

    Overall, it can be seen UK spend more on consumer goods, in comparison to the expenditure done by French people on purchasing of goods.

    In 2010, the major demand was seen of cars in UK, people spent generously on its purchase amounting to 4,50,000 pounds. Followed by cars a significant rise was also seen in take of books adding up to 4,00,000 pounds and cameras coming up to 3,50,000 pounds in UK. However, in terms of computer and perfumes pick up, UK showed a marginal decline in contrast to France.

    In 2010, Although French people spend less on cars & books summing up to 4,00,000 & 3,00,000 pounds respectively in line with UK. A noticeable fall in buy of cameras with 2,00,000 pounds was worth eye catching. Whereas a different pattern emerged in buy of computers and perfumes in France catering to rise of 50,000 pounds in both the areas in study with UK.

    • Falak

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      May 23, 2022 at 12:57 PM
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      , it can be seen UK spend (spent) more on consumer goods – data is of 2010

      Keep writing!!

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  • nithin

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    May 19, 2022 at 12:30 PM
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    The chart explores the comparison of expenditure of two countries that is France and UK in pounds sterling on some of the consumer goods.The list of goods comprises of Cars, Computers, Books, Perfume and Cameras in the year of 2010.

    Overall, Both the countries had their high expenditure on the cars and coming to least expenditure, France had least expenditure on cameras whereas UK spent least on perfume. Comparatively UK had higher expenditure to France on Cars, Books and Cameras whereas France spent more than UK on Computers and Perfume.

    UK and France spent almost same on cars with UK on upper hand of 50,000 pounds sterling more than France which spent 400,000 pounds sterling on cars . Whereas on computers its France which spent more of almost 25,000 pounds sterling more than UK which spent 350,000 pounds sterling.

    There is huge difference in the expenditure of both countries on Cameras and Books. In both the goods its UK which spent more. There is almost one tenth million pounds sterling difference on books and two tenth on cameras.

    • Falak

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      May 23, 2022 at 12:55 PM
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      sentence structure is monotonous and many words have been used repeatedly. There is lack of cohesive devices. Try to use variety of structures.

      Band: 1.5/3

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