[Probir]

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to express my interest for volunteering in school science excursion. I am father of Avinash, who is a student of class 6th in your esteemed school.

First of all, I am grateful to you, for providing such a wonderful opportunity for the parents. I am super excited to have this position and see my child enjoy learning. By profession, I am a teacher myself, so it would be easy for me to keep an eye on my son as well as other children. On top of that, as I am teaching chemistry, I believe, my presence will really help students to learn a lot of things from me in the trip.

Furthermore, I really enjoy to spend time with kids and I am ready to meet new kids and add some value to their knowledge. I look forward to hearing from you at your earliest convenience.

Yours sincerely,

Probir Chakraborty

[isha]

-I am writing this letter to express my interest in volunteering for a school science excursion. I am the father of Avinash, who is a student of class 6th in your esteemed school.

-On top of that, as I am teaching chemistry, I believe my presence will really help students to learn a lot of things from me on the trip.

-Furthermore, I really enjoy spending time with kids, and I am ready to meet new kids and add some value to their knowledge.

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Few errors in prepositions and use of gerund.

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[Nikita]

Dear Sir/ Madam,

I am Nikita Nagpal, mother of Alisha Nagpal (class 6A) and Shubham Nagpal (class 3-A) of your school. I am interested to volunteer the science trip organised to Science City, by your school, next month.

I have done my masters in botany and I have 4 years of teaching experience so I think I would be a good guide and tutor to the students. I am also a local resident of the place where the science tour would be organised and have visited the place several times, so I have a lot of information regarding the place. During my teaching period I have taught students from classes 3rd to 6th and I was quite fine when it came to handling many students at a time.

I would be thankful if you consider my application and let me volunteer for the same.

I look forward to hearing from you at the earliest.

Thank you,

Yours sincerely

Nikita Nagpal.

[Ankur]

Dear Sir/Ma’am,

I am writing this letter regarding the school science trip and ‘I am keenly interested to be a part of this activity as a volunteer.

My name is Ankur Chaudhary and I am working in a medical School, My son Aayush is studying in 5th standard in your school. Primarily he wants me to participate in this event and I should share my science knowledge with kids as I used to teach him science in a fun and easy way.

Secondary I personally want to a be part of such event to teach a different aspect of science and some interesting facts about important discoveries of science and their application in the modern world in a scientific and fun manner. I also want to understand the children’s curiosity and thoughts about Science.

Furthermore, I love to sphere some good time with children in this knowledge and fun activity and I am looking forward to hearing from you for the same.

Yours faithfully

Ankur Chaudhary

[isha]

I am writing this letter regarding the school science trip because I am keenly interested in being a part of this activity as a volunteer.

My name is Ankur Chaudhary, and I work in a medical school; my son Aayush attends your school and is in the fifth grade. He wants me to participate in this event and says I should share my science knowledge with kids, just as I used to teach him science in a fun and easy way.

Secondary I personally want to be part of such an event to teach a different aspect of science and some interesting facts about important discoveries in science and their application in the modern world in a scientific and fun manner. I also want to understand the children’s curiosity and thoughts about science.

Furthermore, I love to spend some good time with children in this educational and fun activity, and I am looking forward to hearing from you for the same.

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[vigneshwar]

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to express my interest in applying for volunteer position to accompany school science trips.

I am vigneshwar, father of student Gautam who is in class 7th in your school.

I am interested in this position since i have the habit of dedicating my time for Corporate Social Responsibility and contributing to society by spending quality time on orphanages and schools to provide their basic needs. So, I would like to volunteer in this science trip to guide and motivate students to sparkle curiosity on science related experiments and activities.

I have the experience in educating children on their moral & good habits. Because of philanthropic nature, I volunteered in multiple school programs to provide basic classes for children in kindling their interest in mathematics and science. I am eloquent in taking classes for students.

I would deeply appreciate if you could consider me for the volunteer position.

Yours faithfully

Vigneshwar Srinivasan

• This reply was modified 1 month ago by  vigneshwar.

[isha]

I am writing to express my interest in applying for a volunteer position to accompany school science trips.I am Vigneshwar, the father of Gautam, a student in your school’s 7th grade.

I am interested in this position since I have the habit of dedicating my time to corporate social responsibility and contributing to society by spending quality time in orphanages and schools to provide for their basic needs. So, I would like to volunteer for this science trip to guide and motivate students to spark curiosity in science related experiments and activities.

I have experience in educating children about their morals and good habits. Because of my philanthropic nature, I volunteered in multiple school programs to provide basic classes for children to kindle their interest in mathematics and science. I am eloquent in taking classes for students.

I would deeply appreciate it if you could consider me for the volunteer position.

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