[Probir]

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to express my interest for volunteering in school science excursion. I am father of Avinash, who is a student of class 6th in your esteemed school.

First of all, I am grateful to you, for providing such a wonderful opportunity for the parents. I am super excited to have this position and see my child enjoy learning. By profession, I am a teacher myself, so it would be easy for me to keep an eye on my son as well as other children. On top of that, as I am teaching chemistry, I believe, my presence will really help students to learn a lot of things from me in the trip.

Furthermore, I really enjoy to spend time with kids and I am ready to meet new kids and add some value to their knowledge. I look forward to hearing from you at your earliest convenience.

Yours sincerely,

Probir Chakraborty

[isha]

-I am writing this letter to express my interest in volunteering for a school science excursion. I am the father of Avinash, who is a student of class 6th in your esteemed school.

-On top of that, as I am teaching chemistry, I believe my presence will really help students to learn a lot of things from me on the trip.

-Furthermore, I really enjoy spending time with kids, and I am ready to meet new kids and add some value to their knowledge.

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Few errors in prepositions and use of gerund.

Band Score- 2.5/3

[Nikita]

Dear Sir/ Madam,

I am Nikita Nagpal, mother of Alisha Nagpal (class 6A) and Shubham Nagpal (class 3-A) of your school. I am interested to volunteer the science trip organised to Science City, by your school, next month.

I have done my masters in botany and I have 4 years of teaching experience so I think I would be a good guide and tutor to the students. I am also a local resident of the place where the science tour would be organised and have visited the place several times, so I have a lot of information regarding the place. During my teaching period I have taught students from classes 3rd to 6th and I was quite fine when it came to handling many students at a time.

I would be thankful if you consider my application and let me volunteer for the same.

I look forward to hearing from you at the earliest.

Thank you,

Yours sincerely

Nikita Nagpal.

[Ankur]

Dear Sir/Ma’am,

I am writing this letter regarding the school science trip and ‘I am keenly interested to be a part of this activity as a volunteer.

My name is Ankur Chaudhary and I am working in a medical School, My son Aayush is studying in 5th standard in your school. Primarily he wants me to participate in this event and I should share my science knowledge with kids as I used to teach him science in a fun and easy way.

Secondary I personally want to a be part of such event to teach a different aspect of science and some interesting facts about important discoveries of science and their application in the modern world in a scientific and fun manner. I also want to understand the children’s curiosity and thoughts about Science.

Furthermore, I love to sphere some good time with children in this knowledge and fun activity and I am looking forward to hearing from you for the same.

Yours faithfully

Ankur Chaudhary

[isha]

I am writing this letter regarding the school science trip because I am keenly interested in being a part of this activity as a volunteer.

My name is Ankur Chaudhary, and I work in a medical school; my son Aayush attends your school and is in the fifth grade. He wants me to participate in this event and says I should share my science knowledge with kids, just as I used to teach him science in a fun and easy way.

Secondary I personally want to be part of such an event to teach a different aspect of science and some interesting facts about important discoveries in science and their application in the modern world in a scientific and fun manner. I also want to understand the children’s curiosity and thoughts about science.

Furthermore, I love to spend some good time with children in this educational and fun activity, and I am looking forward to hearing from you for the same.

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Bands- 2/3

[vigneshwar]

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to express my interest in applying for volunteer position to accompany school science trips.

I am vigneshwar, father of student Gautam who is in class 7th in your school.

I am interested in this position since i have the habit of dedicating my time for Corporate Social Responsibility and contributing to society by spending quality time on orphanages and schools to provide their basic needs. So, I would like to volunteer in this science trip to guide and motivate students to sparkle curiosity on science related experiments and activities.

I have the experience in educating children on their moral & good habits. Because of philanthropic nature, I volunteered in multiple school programs to provide basic classes for children in kindling their interest in mathematics and science. I am eloquent in taking classes for students.

I would deeply appreciate if you could consider me for the volunteer position.

Yours faithfully

Vigneshwar Srinivasan

[isha]

I am writing to express my interest in applying for a volunteer position to accompany school science trips.I am Vigneshwar, the father of Gautam, a student in your school’s 7th grade.

I am interested in this position since I have the habit of dedicating my time to corporate social responsibility and contributing to society by spending quality time in orphanages and schools to provide for their basic needs. So, I would like to volunteer for this science trip to guide and motivate students to spark curiosity in science related experiments and activities.

I have experience in educating children about their morals and good habits. Because of my philanthropic nature, I volunteered in multiple school programs to provide basic classes for children to kindle their interest in mathematics and science. I am eloquent in taking classes for students.

I would deeply appreciate it if you could consider me for the volunteer position.

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Bands: 1.5/3

[Ansar]

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this with regards convey my intent to be part of volunteering service i can offer as part of your science trip organized by school.My daughter shahla studying in 5th standards in your prominent school had informed me about the volunteering job.I felt overwhelmed when my daughter told aboout the volunteering job.I am well versed and have good experience in feild of volunteering.

From last 10 years i am involved in different kind of voluntary jobs for example i have effectively served as hospital volunteer. on weekends i work at animal shelters like walking pets etc. By volunteering i felt self-esteem, happiness and satisfaction in my life.

I believe that my experice would benifit kids as i am very affectionate and interactive person who can gel up with kids easily.

Furthermore, I really enjoy spending time with kids and would be elated to meet new kids. I believe my presence will have valuable impact on kids knowledge.

I am looking forward for this oppurtunity and expecting a postive response from you at earliest.

Yours sincerely,

Ansar Ali

[isha]

Dear Sir/Madam,

I’m writing to express my desire to participate in the volunteer service I can provide as part of your school’s science trip.My daughter Shahla, who is in fifth grade at your prestigious school, informed me about the volunteer opportunity.I felt overwhelmed when my daughter told me about the volunteer job. I am well versed and have good experience in the field of volunteering.

I’ve been involved in various types of volunteer work over the last ten years, including serving as a hospital volunteer.On weekends, i work at animal shelters, like walking pets, etc. I feel content, happy, and satisfied in my life because I volunteer. I believe that my experience would benefit kids, as i am a very affectionate and interactive person who can gel with kids easily.

Furthermore, I really enjoy spending time with kids and would be delighted to meet new kids. I believe my presence will have a valuable impact on the kids knowledge.

I am looking forward to this opportunity and expect a positive response from you at the earliest.

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Bands – 1.5/3

[Vikas]

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to express my interest to the volunteers required for the school science trips scheduled next month.

My name is Vikas Garg, I am an alumnus of this prestigious institute and currently both of my children are studying here. While one of my kids is in grade 3, the other one is in grade 5.

Although, I am a doctor now but since my childhood, I was always fascinated by these science educational tours and learned how things work and further, it would be my honour to take this journey along with my children for my own school.

In addition to this, I have extensive experience in dealing with children as I was a teacher myself few years ago and assisted children during school educational outings.

I would be grateful if you please consider me for this effort, looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,

Vikas Garg