[Probir]

It has been discovered recently that most of the lawbreakers have tendency to indulge in criminal activities again, once they released from jail. This essay will elucidate the reasons and possible solutions to overcome it.

To commence with, those who have past offence are more likely to indulge in illegal matters, as they are well aware that no stringent action will be taken against them and the stay behind bars is also quite comfortable. First, there is no fear among offenders regarding imprisonment, it’s more like a home stay for them. Furthermore, here they meet with other wrongdoer which enhance the growth of criminal mind in them and made the situation worst. To exemplify, it has been found that many rowdy gangs are developed inside the jail only.

The feasible solutions to resolve this issue can be, first, proper tracking of each and every convict who has a criminal record, for doing that their biometric data must be stored in police record. In addition to that, some tracking chip should be implant in their body so that they can be trace easily anywhere. Second, the life in prison must be painful, so that everyone should afraid of incarceration and it can be done easily by increasing scale of punishments inside the bars.

To conclude, the issue of recommitting offence even after confinement can be reduce by keeping an eye on their activities and making prisons like hell, so fear of getting into it, stop culprits from breaking law.

[isha]

It has been discovered recently that most lawbreakers have a tendency to indulge in criminal activities again, once they are released from jail. This essay will elucidate the reasons and possible solutions to overcome it.

To commence with, those who have committed past offences are more likely to indulge in illegal matters, as they are well aware that no stringent action will be taken against them and the stay behind bars is also quite comfortable. First, there is no fear among offenders regarding imprisonment; it’s more like a home stay for them. Furthermore, here they meet with other wrongdoers, which enhances the growth of criminal minds in them and makes the situation worse. To exemplify, it has been found that many rowdy gangs are developed inside the jail only.

The feasible solutions to resolve this issue can be, first, proper tracking of each and every convict who has a criminal record. For doing that, their biometric data must be stored in police records. In addition to that, some tracking chip should be implanted in their body so that they can be traced easily anywhere. Second, life in prison must be painful, so that everyone should be afraid of incarceration, and it can be done easily by increasing the scale of punishments inside the bars.

To conclude, the issue of recommitting offences even after confinement can be reduced by keeping an eye on their activities and making prisons like hell, so the fear of getting into them stops culprits from breaking the law.

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-Coherence and clarity is there.

-Revise your task so that you can avoid silly errors.

Bands – 4/6

[Shibin Siby]

Studies conducted recently on ex-convicts released from prison indicates that majority of prisoner after serving their sentence returns to a life of crime. This essay is focused on addressing the reasons and solutions for the problem at hand.

Of all the reasons that could be thought on why this is occurring I have narrowed it down to two major points social stigma and improper rehabilitation. Once a person gets convicted and sent to prison society tends to brand him or her as a social outcast. Once they complete their punishments reintegration to society is proven to be very difficult. Employment opportunities are non-existent and finding an honest living becomes nearer quite impossible, such people find crime more rewarding and helpful for existence rather than going the tedious path to convince people of their atonement. Next reason is improper rehabilitation when they are detainees. They usually find the correctional institutions having very harsh environments where they find a range of people from small time crooks to hardened criminals. Surviving this harsh environment and going back to society without any rehabilitation programs might be reason for repeated offense even after jail time for many ex-prisoners.

Such people can be helped by a conscious effort by the governing bodies to starting a fresh life after their life in prison. Rehabilitation programs should include psychological profiling to make sure they are fit for joining back the society, labor opportunities exclusively for prisoners that guarantees them at least a minimum wage to get their lives together and general counseling for the release prisoners to keep their mental health in a good condition. Dealing with social stigma is a very big challenge because changing human beliefs take time. Making the masses understand that everybody deserves a second chance and a new beginning could be achieved by creating media to advertise how imprisonment might affect an individual seems to be a solution. The media could be of online videos, movies, plays or music. Changing core beliefs of humans is a daunting task but I feel this is a viable approach. We can summarize that life after prison is not easy in multiple levels and it is only fair if we could give hope to people who are genuinely repenting their past.

[isha]

Studies conducted recently on ex-convicts released from prison indicate that the majority of prisoners, after serving their sentence, return to a life of crime. This essay is focused on addressing the reasons and solutions for the problem at hand.

Of all the reasons that could be thought of why this is occurring, I have narrowed it down to two major points: social stigma and improper rehabilitation. Once a person gets convicted and sent to prison, society tends to brand him or her as a social outcast. Once they complete their punishments, reintegration into society is proven to be very difficult. Employment opportunities are non-existent and finding an honest living becomes nearer quite impossible, such people find crime more rewarding and helpful for existence rather than going the tedious path to convince people of their atonement. Next reason is improper rehabilitation when they are detainees. They usually find correctional institutions have very harsh environment where they find a range of people, from small time crooks to hardened criminals. Surviving this harsh environment and going back to society without any rehabilitation programmes might be a reason for repeated offences even after jail time for many ex-prisoners.

Such people can be helped by a conscious effort by the governing bodies to start a fresh life after their life in prison. Rehabilitation programs should include psychological profiling to make sure they are fit to rejoin society, labor opportunities exclusively for prisoners that guarantee them at least a minimum wage to get their lives together, and general counselling for the released prisoners to keep their mental health in good condition. Dealing with social stigma is a very big challenge because changing human beliefs take time. Making the masses understand that everybody deserves a second chance and a new beginning could be achieved by creating media to advertise how imprisonment might affect an individual seems to be a solution. The medium could be online videos, movies, plays, or music. Changing the core beliefs of humans is a daunting task, but I feel this is a viable approach.

To conclude, it can be summarised that life after prison is not easy on multiple levels, and it is only fair if we could give hope to people who are genuinely repenting their past.

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Bands – 3.5/6

[vigneshwar]

Recently, A research has been conducted on the prisoners who got released from prison after serving their sentence. It states that criminals are most likely to involve in criminal activity after being released. This essay discusses about the reasons behind crimes of these prisoners and what measures can be taken to overcome it.

The main problems are Social Stigma and lack of proper rehabilitation. Social Stigma is one of the major cause of the high recidivism rates. Once wrong doers got released from prison, they strive to get socialised with the society. Society starts discriminating them due to their past offence, moreover they are being disregarded as well. Being in distress, offenders are being forced to commit crimes again. While serving their sentence, Prisoners lacks the proper rehabilitation. Criminals are not being properly counselled to inculcate ethical behaviour and morality. Prison environment results in creating distress on the prisoners. Without proper counselling, their attempt to retaliate will increase progressively and it causes them to commit crimes again by confronting the enemy after being released.

In my opinion, the best solution is to provide financial support in initial stages in addition to that they need proper training and right opportunities to thrive in the society. Prisoners are getting impoverished and it persuades them to involve in illicit activities. So, they need proper financial support at early stages to survive in society until they find their livelihood. In this fast growing contemporary world, prisoners cannot compete with society if they lack in skills. On being released, Government should assist them in finding right opportunities by insisting employers to consider them irrespective of their pass offence.

In conclusion, The main cause of high recidivism rates in prisoners are Social Stigma and lack of proper rehabilitation which results in immorality. The most effective solution is to support them financially in early stages and offer proper training to improve their virtue and skills.

[isha]

Recently, research has been conducted on prisoners who were released from prison after serving their sentence. It states that criminals are most likely to be involved in criminal activity after being released. This essay discusses the reasons behind the crimes of these prisoners and what measures can be taken to overcome them.

The main problems are social stigma and a lack of proper rehabilitation. Social stigma is one of the major cause of the high recidivism rates. Once wrong doers are released from prison, they strive to get back into society. Society has started discriminating against them due to their past offences; furthermore, they are being disregarded as well. Offenders who are in distress are being forced to commit crimes again. While serving their sentence, prisoners lack the proper rehabilitation. Criminals are not being properly counselled to inculcate ethical behaviour and morality. Prison environment results in creating distress for the prisoners. Without proper counselling, their attempts to retaliate will increase progressively, and it will cause them to commit crimes again by confronting the enemy after being released.

In my opinion, the best solution is to provide financial support in the initial stages. In addition to that, they need proper training and right opportunities to thrive in society. Prisoners are getting impoverished and it persuades them to get involved in illicit activities. So, they need proper financial support at early stages to survive in society until they find their livelihood. In this fast growing contemporary world, prisoners cannot compete with society if they lack skills. The government should assist them in finding right opportunities by insisting employers consider them irrespective of their pass offence.

In conclusion, the main causes of high recidivism rates in prisoners are social stigma and lack of proper rehabilitation, which results in immorality. The most effective solution is to financially support them in the early stages and provide proper training to improve their virtues and skills.

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Bands – 3.5/6

[Praneeth]

As per recent studies, it is observed that almost all lawbreakers tend to show violent traits and commit additional crimes upon being discharged from the confinements. This essay will explain the causes and potential solutions to reduce it.

There are several reasons why offenders continue to commit crimes upon being released. It is their lack of ability to socialize and evolve to survive in and from the hatred of the world. To be more precise, society refuses to look at the good part or does not try to understand whether they changed or not, instead criticizes them and this leads them to think that they better be the person as before. Another reason is due to the treatments they get in the prisons. For example, the brutal punishments and environment filled with negative thoughts will not help them to change into a better person and leads them to commit crimes.

To tackle such cases, it is important to analyze and create new approaches to mold their thought process. So for this, the form of punishment should depend upon what type of criminal activity was done by the offender. For example, the rehabilitation centers should work on their mental abilities to ensure they have changed and are emotionally stable to face the outside world. One more solution can be to provide them with financial means to cope with the fast-growing world and as they would be all by themselves and these may help them in getting back to their normal life.

In conclusion, to avoid or reduce the wrongdoing by the lawbreakers, these solutions to recheck and provide them with an effective rehabilitation center will increase the chances of turning them into stable beings. It also depends on individuals’ attitudes whether to get influenced by others or to remain unchanged in committing the crimes.

[isha]

As per recent studies, it is observed that almost all lawbreakers tend to show violent traits and commit additional crimes upon being discharged from confinement. This essay will explain the causes and potential solutions to reduce it.

There are several reasons why offenders continue to commit crimes after being released. It is their lack of ability to socialize and evolve to survive in and from the hatred of the world. To be more specific, society refuses to look at the positive aspects or tries to understand whether they changed or not, instead criticising them, leading them to believe that they should remain the same person they were before. Another reason is due to the treatment they get in prison. For example, the brutal punishments and an environment filled with negative thoughts will not help them to change into a better person and will lead them to commit crimes.

To tackle such cases, it is important to analyze and create new approaches to mold their thought process. So, for this, the form of punishment should depend upon what type of criminal activity was committed by the offender. For example, the rehabilitation centers should work on their mental abilities to ensure they have changed and are emotionally stable to face the outside world. One more solution can be to provide them with financial means to cope with the fast-growing world as they would be all by themselves and this may help them to get back to their normal life.

In conclusion, to avoid or reduce the wrongdoing by lawbreakers, these solutions to recheck and provide them with an effective rehabilitation center will increase the chances of turning them into stable beings. It also depends on individuals’ attitudes whether to get influenced by others or to remain unchanged in committing crimes.

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Bands -4/6

[sheena]

Studies have shown that prisoners, who are released from prison are involved in illegal activities again and this essay will discuss the probable reasons and possible solutions to stop them from such criminal acts.

There are multiple causes for high recidivism rates among offenders and bad treatments from fellow inmates, jailors and other police staffs is one of the main reasons for the same. Convicts are punished ruthlessly inside cells and limited effort is put to inculcate moral values in their life. Due to this, even if they are out of the prison, they do not have any mental strength to hold themselves back from wrongdoings. Furthermore, Ex-convicts are not always accepted by the family or society and they struggle to find a livelihood for themselves. For instance, many employers deny jobs for people with past criminal records. Because of this social stigma, they fail to keep up their ethical behaviour and end up in committing crimes again.

In my opinion, recidivism can be prevented by inducing ethical behaviours, rehabilitating and supporting past offenders to live a decent life. While they are serving their imprisonment, human rights should not be violated, this includes providing medical facilities including psychological support and a better way of earning money to ensure financial stability once they are out of the cell. They can also be empowered to pursue their interest areas, to feel a sense of achievement in their life. Moreover, authorities should be able to understand the motive of the offenders and address those issues rather than ill-treating the convicts.

In conclusion, high recidivism rates are highly problematic in the society and authorities, common people, employers and doctors need to participate in the rehabilitating ex-convicts.

[isha]

Studies have shown that prisoners, who are released from prison are involved in illegal activities again(get involved in illegal activities again), and this essay will discuss the probable reasons and possible solutions to stop them from committing such criminal acts.

There are multiple causes for high recidivism rates among offenders, and bad treatment from fellow inmates, jailors, and other police staff is one of the main reasons for the same. Convicts are punished ruthlessly inside cells, and limited effort is put to inculcate moral values in their lives. Due to this, even if they are out of prison, they do not have any mental strength to hold themselves back from wrongdoings. Furthermore, ex-convicts are not always accepted by their families or society, and they struggle to find a livelihood for themselves. For instance, many employers deny jobs to people with past criminal records. Because of this social stigma, they fail to keep up their ethical behaviour and end up committing crimes again.

In my opinion, recidivism can be prevented by inducing ethical behaviours and rehabilitating and supporting past offenders to live a decent life. While they are serving their imprisonment, human rights should not be violated, this includes providing medical facilities, including psychological support and a better way of earning money to ensure financial stability once they are out of the cell. They can also be empowered to pursue their interests and to feel a sense of achievement in their lives. Moreover, authorities should be able to understand the motives of the offenders and address those issues rather than ill-treating the convicts.

In conclusion, high recidivism rates are highly problematic in society, and authorities, common people, employers, and doctors need to participate in rehabilitating ex-convicts.

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Bands- 3.5/6

[Krithiga]

In this modern era, many unlawful incidents occur at various places. Nowadays, studies show that offenders who have been to jail frequently intend to do more offences once they get out of jail. This essay delves into some of the causes behind these unlawful acts and recommends possible solutions.

First of all, offenders are not treated equally to others in society. Owing to this, they get into the mode of depression and tend to commit more number of crimes. For instance, a person who had been involved in chain snatching previously, if wanted to live a normal life by earning for his day-to-day living, he would not provide any job opportunities to manage his daily expenses. This makes him more stressed and leads to violence-related activities. In addition, lawbreakers receive neither family guidance nor financial assistance from their close ones. Hence, this makes them to think that they have no one for them in this society which influences them to commit more offences.

Furthermore, the best possible solution is to treat people coming out of confinement with duo respect. As they have already been penalized for their committed mistakes, fellow citizens should accept them and encourage them by providing small-scale jobs to manage their daily living. This motivates them and helps them to lead a normal life. Also, they can involve in some social activities during their leisure hours such as helping the poor and blind people which will help them overcome thinking about their past life. Thus, this makes them feel confident and more energetic in handling their futuristic needs.

To conclude, everyone is prone to make mistakes based on circumstances. However, when punishments are already given to the committed unlawful acts, fellow individuals should remember that and treat them with social respect and motivate them to do good activities to lead a happy life.

[sreenag]

Obviously, it has been noticed in many social media and newspapers that researchers state and proved that criminals are committing crimes again after getting released from jail. However, this essay will be discussing about the reasons behind doing illegal things again by lawbreakers and how to overcome from it.

As far as I am considering, there are many reasons offenders are doing offenses repeatedly even though after out of custody. The main reason can be they are not getting proper respect and jobs in the market. For example, culprits are treated rudely by the society based on the things that happened in the past. As a result, these all situations lead them to do faults again.

To get rid of this problem, Firstly, folks need to understand and accept them with respect as they are already penalized as per the national law and the government should also be responsible to educate society that wrongdoers are already trained by giving them proper rehabilitation in jail. Secondly, for criminals, it’s better to get noticed by other fellow citizens by participating in some NGOs or should do some good services so that people will start believing in them. Furthermore, Police should also track them by utilizing the latest technologies such as chip trackers. They can place these chips on criminals to track and monitor their activities for some days and provide proper counseling or motivate them to do good activities to lead a happy life if they found any suspicious things.

In conclusion, still, if criminals recommit offenses even after confinement then authorities should punish lawbreakers severely and make prisons like hell so that they will get fear before doing such kind of crimes again.